Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unclear phrases like "many kind of sophisticated on the travelling seat." Use precise vocabulary (view, privacy, fresh air, comfort) and keep to about 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy the view and find it more private. For example, on trains I can watch the landscape pass by, which helps me relax, and on planes I can rest my head against the wall comfortably.

제안: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence, then give one or two specific details about a particular trip. Use appropriate linking words (for example, because, when, so) and correct tense. Avoid vague or repetitive phrasing.

예시: Yes, I often took long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, every summer we drove for ten hours to visit my grandparents, and I remember playing games in the car and enjoying stops at interesting towns along the way.

× Yes, I do prefer to sit by the window because, uh, when, uh, when I'm traveling. So there are many kind of sophisticated on the travelling seat. So yeah, I think that window seat is preferred for me and yeah, I'm comfortable. This this it.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling. There are many kinds of features on the travel seat. So yeah, I think the window seat is better for me and I'm comfortable with it.

Errors: unnecessary use of 'do' with 'prefer' (present tense simple preference), missing plural form 'kinds', incorrect noun 'sophisticated' used instead of 'features' or 'design features', incorrect phrase 'on the travelling seat' -> 'on the travel seat' or 'of the seat', awkward passive/ comparative phrasing 'is preferred for me' -> 'is better for me', and redundant fragments 'This this it'. Suggestions: Use simple present for general preferences (I prefer), make countable nouns plural when using 'many' (many kinds), choose correct noun to match meaning (features, aspects), use natural comparative phrasing (better for me), and remove filler/redundant fragments. Maintain present-tense consistency for preferences.

× Yes, I have a long journey with the with my family.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family.

Error: incorrect use of present perfect 'have' for a specific past event; also duplicated 'the with'. Suggestion: Use simple past 'had' to describe a completed event in childhood and remove the extra article/word. Maintain past-tense consistency for childhood experiences.

× I'll speaking because of I think my family is always to be from my opinion, so there are also for me.

✓ I will speak about it because I think my family is very important to me.

Errors: ungrammatical future clause 'I'll speaking' (auxiliary plus -ing wrong), incorrect phrase 'because of I think' and 'my family is always to be from my opinion' which is nonsensical, and unclear 'so there are also for me'. Suggestions: Use correct future form 'I will speak' or simple present 'I want to say', structure the reason clause clearly ('because I think...'), and express the intended meaning ('my family is important to me' or 'I always value my family'). Ensure verb forms and clause connections are correct.