Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar/word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and incorrect prepositions/determiners (e.g., “such an high altitude”, “say by the window”).

예시: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. For example, on planes I enjoy watching the clouds and the tiny houses below because the view is calming and interesting. Also, sitting by the window helps me feel relaxed during long journeys.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail or brief anecdote. Correct awkward phrasing (“felt beautiful” and “views underneath”) and use linking words to show sequence (e.g., “at first… then…”). Keep it to 2–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a memorable long journey to Vizag with my family when I was a child. It was my first time flying, so I was nervous at first, but then I relaxed when I saw the spectacular landscape below. The experience made the trip very special for me.

× 'the small houses that look so beautiful from such an high altitude.'

✓ 'the small houses that look so beautiful from such a high altitude.'

'An' is used before vowel sounds; "high" begins with a consonant sound so the correct article is "a." This is an article choice related to singular/plural context and countable noun phrase construction. Suggestion: use "a" before consonant sounds and "an" before vowel sounds.'

× 'I like to observe the nature while I am travelling, especially when I am on the plane.'

✓ 'I like to observe nature while I am travelling, especially when I am on a plane.'

'Nature' is an uncountable noun and does not usually take the definite article here; remove "the." Also, use the indefinite article "a" with "plane" when referring to being on any plane in general. Suggestion: omit "the" before uncountable nouns when speaking generally and use "a/an" for one nonspecific item.'

× 'so I definitely prefer to say by the window.'

✓ 'so I definitely prefer to sit by the window.'

'Prefer to say' is incorrect collocation; the correct verb for choosing a seat is "sit." The subject-verb agreement itself is fine but the verb choice creates an ungrammatical sentence. Suggestion: use verbs that collocate with the intended action, e.g., "sit by the window."'} ,{