Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сделайте ответ более естественным и кратким, уберите лишние слова и исправьте небольшие ошибки. Начните с чётного тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных подробности, используя связки (for example, because, which). Избегайте слов-паразитов и грамматических ошибок (например, «yet» здесь лишнее).

예시: I prefer a window seat because I can admire the scenery. For example, on train journeys through the mountains I enjoy watching the changing landscapes, which helps me relax and makes the trip more enjoyable.

제안: Исправьте слова и порядок слов, избегайте нелепых выражений («long doughnuts»). Дайте ясный тематический ответ, затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример с указанием времени или места. Используйте связки (because, however, since) и закончите предложение корректно.

예시: No, we didn't have long trips when I was a child because my parents preferred short weekend breaks nearby. However, about two years ago we started travelling abroad, and since then we've taken longer trips, sometimes staying abroad for several weeks.

× Definitely yet, I prefer a window seat because I can admire the beautiful scenery and discover new places as we pass by, for example, on train journeys, through the mountains, I enjoy watching the changing landscapes, which helps me relax and makes the trip much more enjoyable.

✓ I definitely prefer a window seat because I can admire the beautiful scenery and discover new places as we pass by; for example, on train journeys through the mountains, I enjoy watching the changing landscapes, which helps me relax and makes the trip much more enjoyable.

The original sentence contains awkward word order and unnecessary commas that break the sentence flow. 'Definitely yet' is incorrect; 'definitely' should come before the verb and 'yet' is unnecessary. Commas separate clauses improperly (comma splices). Use a semicolon or restructure clauses and remove 'yet'. Also move 'for example' next to the example phrase. Suggestion: place adverb 'definitely' before the verb, remove 'yet', combine related clauses correctly using connectors or punctuation.

× No, we didn't have long doughnuts when I was a child because my parents preferred short weekends visited nearby.

✓ No, we didn't have long holidays when I was a child because my parents preferred short weekend trips nearby.

The phrase 'long doughnuts' is incorrect—likely a mischoice for 'long holidays' or 'long trips'. 'Short weekends visited nearby' is ungrammatical. Use the quantifier 'short' with 'weekend trips' and use 'nearby' as an adverb after the noun. Also 'weekend' should be singular adjective modifying 'trips'. Suggestion: replace the wrong noun with 'holidays' or 'trips' and reorder to 'short weekend trips nearby'.

× However, about two years ago my family began to travel abroad and since then we have often taken longer trips and sometimes stayed for several weeks for example

✓ However, about two years ago my family began to travel abroad, and since then we have often taken longer trips and sometimes stayed for several weeks, for example.

The sentence needs a comma after 'abroad' before the coordinating conjunction 'and'. The tense usage 'began to travel' (past) with 'since then we have often taken' (present perfect) is acceptable because it indicates actions from that past point to the present. The phrase 'for example' should be set off with commas. Suggestion: add missing punctuation to clarify the sentence structure and separate the example phrase.