Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitive phrasing and overly personal or potentially awkward details. Use linking words to explain the change in preference and give one brief reason. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I used to prefer a window seat, but now I usually choose the aisle seat. As I’ve gotten older, I find the aisle more convenient because it’s easier to get up quickly, especially on long journeys.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and add a specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid awkward phrasing and grammar errors (use correct tense and word order). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and be more precise about frequency or an example.

예시: Not really — we didn’t take long trips as a family. Usually we drove from our hometown to the nearby city for day trips, which took about an hour each way.

× I used to sit by the window and traveling before, however as I got older I preferred to sit in the aisle seat because it's closer to the restroom as I have bowel movement a lot. So now that I'm older I prefer the aisle seat.

✓ I used to sit by the window and travel before; however, as I got older I preferred to sit in the aisle seat because it's closer to the restroom since I have bowel movements a lot. Now that I'm older I prefer the aisle seat.

The original sentence mixes a bare infinitive with a gerund after 'used to'. After 'used to' the base form 'travel' is required, not 'traveling' (verb + -ing form error). Also 'as' used twice causes style issues; replace one with 'since' for cause. 'Bowel movement' should be plural 'bowel movements' to indicate repeated occurrences. Use punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: use 'used to travel' and pluralize 'bowel movements' and improve connectors.

× I cannot remember a time where in my family traveled for a long distance.

✓ I cannot remember a time when my family traveled a long distance.

The phrase 'where in my family traveled' is ungrammatical (sentence structure error). Use the relative conjunction 'when' to refer to a time, and order the subject 'my family' before the verb 'traveled'. Remove unnecessary 'in'. Suggestion: use 'a time when my family traveled' or 'a time when we traveled as a family'.

× What we usually do before is travel from our hometown to the city, which just takes an hour to drive.

✓ What we usually did before was travel from our hometown to the city, which took only an hour by car.

The context refers to habitual actions in the past ('as a child'), so the past tense 'did' and 'took' are appropriate (past tense issue). Also 'just takes an hour to drive' mixes present tense; change to 'took only an hour by car' for clarity. Use 'by car' rather than 'to drive'. 'Only' fits better than 'just' in this context. Suggestion: match tense to the time frame and use natural phrasing like 'took only an hour by car.'