Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incorrect verb forms (e.g., "haven't more opportunity", "stinging a window seat"). Be specific about why the window helps when you get motion sickness and mention what you enjoy watching outside to add detail.

예시: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat. Firstly, I like looking out at the scenery during the trip, which helps me relax. Also, when I feel motion sick, having a stable view of the horizon from the window reduces my nausea.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and add specific, coherent details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "we used to have them a lot", "we don't do that much now"). Name the place confidently and describe at least two concrete memories (activities, food, weather) to make the story vivid and relevant.

예시: Yes, we often took long trips when I was a child, though we don't travel as much now. One trip I clearly remember was to Antalya on Turkey's Mediterranean coast; we spent our days swimming on warm sandy beaches and trying fresh seafood at local restaurants. I particularly remember watching the sunset from a boat, which made the holiday special.

× Yes, I do prefer window seats because I haven't more opportunity to watch outside rather than setting an aisle seat.

✓ Yes, I prefer window seats because I don't have as many opportunities to look outside as I would when sitting in an aisle seat.

Original errors: 'I do prefer' is unnecessary emphatic present; 'I haven't more opportunity' is incorrect use of 'have' with 'more' and contraction; 'to watch outside' uses wrong verb and preposition; 'setting an aisle seat' uses wrong verb form. Correction uses simple present ('I prefer') for habits, uses 'don't have as many opportunities' for plural countable 'opportunities', uses 'look outside' for viewing, and 'sitting in an aisle seat' with correct present participle and preposition. Suggestion: use simple present for preferences, pair 'have' with countable/uncountable correctly, use 'sitting in' + noun for location, and use 'look' or 'watch' appropriately.

× And also uh, sometimes I'm having a stomach sickness that's why stinging a window seat is makes more a greater rather than aisle side.

✓ Also, sometimes I get motion sickness, so sitting in a window seat feels much better than sitting on the aisle side.

Original errors: 'I'm having a stomach sickness' is unnatural present continuous and article use; 'stinging a window seat' is incorrect word 'stinging' instead of 'sitting'; 'is makes more a greater' is ungrammatical combination of verbs and modifiers; 'rather than aisle side' wrong preposition and noun phrase. Correction uses simple present 'I get motion sickness' (habitual), 'so sitting in a window seat feels much better than sitting on the aisle' with correct preposition and comparison. Suggestion: use idiomatic phrase 'get motion sickness', use 'sitting in/on' with seat positions, and form comparisons with 'much better than'.

× When I was a child, we used to have it a lot, but right now we don't have really much.

✓ When I was a child, we used to travel a lot, but right now we don't travel much.

Original errors: 'used to have it a lot' is vague and uses wrong verb 'have' for 'travel'; 'right now we don't have really much' mixes present time adverb with awkward 'have' and placement of 'really'. Correction replaces 'have it' with 'travel' and uses 'don't travel much' for present habitual negation. Suggestion: use 'used to + verb' for past habits and use 'don't + verb' for present habits; place adverbs like 'really' or 'much' correctly.

× The clearly remembered one for me is the one that we went to Mediterranean side of Turkey, which is I think Antalya.

✓ The trip I clearly remember is when we went to the Mediterranean coast of Turkey, which I think was Antalya.

Original errors: 'The clearly remembered one for me is the one that we went to...' is awkward word order; 'Mediterranean side' would be better as 'Mediterranean coast'; 'which is I think Antalya' has incorrect tense and word order. Correction reorders to natural English: 'The trip I clearly remember is when we went to the Mediterranean coast of Turkey, which I think was Antalya.' Suggestion: use concise noun phrases ('the trip I remember'), 'coast' for geographical area, and past tense 'was' for identifying a past place.

× It was really good trip for me and my family. I just remembered the times that I spent there and it was really great.

✓ It was a really good trip for my family and me. I still remember the time I spent there; it was wonderful.

Original errors: missing article 'a' before 'really good trip'; incorrect object order 'for me and my family' is grammatical but more natural 'for my family and me'; 'I just remembered' uses past simple where present perfect/simple present 'still remember' is more natural for ongoing memory; 'the times that I spent there' can be simplified. Correction adds article, adjusts pronoun order and tense to present 'still remember' or past simple consistently. Suggestion: include articles before singular countable nouns, use 'my family and me' as object, and choose tense that matches the speaker's intended meaning (ongoing memory vs completed action).