Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + reason). Avoid wrong word choices and filler sounds. Use linking words for support and keep within 3–4 concise sentences. Be specific about what you enjoy and how it affects you.

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery change. For example, I like seeing mountains and coastlines pass by, which helps me relax. As a result, the journey feels more enjoyable and peaceful.

제안: Fix grammar, verb tense and vocabulary accuracy. Begin with a clear topic sentence and add specific supporting details (when, who, what you liked). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incorrect place names. Keep answers natural and concise.

예시: Yes, I went on several long journeys with my family when I was a child. We often travelled to Bagan to see the ancient temples and broad landscapes, and I remember being amazed by how picturesque everything looked. Because of those trips, Bagan still feels like a living painting in my memory.

× I am profiled to sit by the window as I'm traffic because I like watching dictionary change and the landscape.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I like watching the scenery change and the landscape.

'Profiled' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'prefer' (preference). 'I'm traffic' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'when I travel'. 'Dictionary change' is wrong word choice; use 'scenery change'. Ensure verbs and nouns match meaning and use simple present for habitual preference.

× For example, I like watching the mountains and the coastline pass by.

✓ For example, I like watching the mountains and the coastline pass by.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. The adverbial phrase 'For example' is correctly placed and the verb 'pass by' is appropriate for moving scenery.

× It makes me relax and become UMM and that make the journey more.

✓ It helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable.

'Makes me relax' is acceptable but 'helps me relax' is more natural. 'Become UMM' is unclear and nonstandard; replace with 'relaxed'. Subject-verb agreement: 'that make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'that' or 'it'. Add an adjective 'enjoyable' to complete the idea.

× I had a family long journey when I was a child.

✓ I had a long family journey when I was a child.

Word order is awkward; 'long family journey' should be 'long family journey' or more natural 'long journey with my family'. Use past simple 'had' correctly for a past event.

× We used to travel to Bagan and we love seeing the Asian tempets and the landscapes up again.

✓ We used to travel to Bagan and we loved seeing the Asian temples and the landscapes again.

Tense consistency: talking about childhood trips requires past tense 'loved' rather than 'love'. 'Tempets' is a misspelling; correct word is 'temples'. 'Up again' is unnecessary; replace with 'again' or omit. Keep past tense throughout the sentence.

× If I had to describe Baguette in one way, it looks like a living painting.

✓ If I had to describe Bagan in one way, I would say it looks like a living painting.

Place name was likely misspelled as 'Baguette' instead of 'Bagan'. In a conditional 'If I had to describe...,' use 'I would say' to complete the clause; 'it looks' could remain but 'I would say it looks like' is more idiomatic. Maintain conditional structure and correct proper noun spelling.