Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and prepositions, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences. For example, say you enjoy the view and give a concrete detail about what you notice outside. Also replace informal fillers ("yeah, I know") with brief pauses or a linking phrase.

예시: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, I like watching houses and small shops pass by along country roads, which helps me relax and feel refreshed.

제안: Correct tense and phrasing, organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use past simple for childhood experiences, avoid unclear expressions ("I was tall", "can't sort out"), and give a specific reason or memorable detail. Use a linking word (e.g., "for example" or "because") to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I had a long trip with my family when I was a child. For example, we traveled to Germany, which felt very exciting because I wanted to see the traditional German towns and try local food, and that trip stayed in my memory.

× Yeah, I like to sit the window when traveling too much because I can see the view outside.

✓ Yeah, I like to sit by the window when traveling because I can see the view outside.

The sentence uses the wrong preposition: 'sit the window' is missing the preposition 'by'. Use 'sit by the window' to indicate location beside the window. Also remove 'too much' as it is unnatural here; use simply 'when traveling' to match the intended meaning.

× I can see how the house on on the road, House of the individual.

✓ I can see houses on the road, each person's house.

The original has article and word choice errors. 'how the house on on the road' is incorrect; use plural 'houses on the road' to match general observation (singular/plural choice). 'House of the individual' is awkward; 'each person's house' is clearer. Also remove the duplicated 'on'.

× Yeah, I know.

✓ Yes, I know.

This is a minor register issue rather than strict grammar, but 'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is better in a test context. No structural verb error.

× And it feels so fresh.

✓ And it feels so refreshing.

'Feels fresh' is acceptable but 'feels so fresh' is slightly odd for scenery; 'refreshing' (adjective describing the experience) is more natural. This is an adjustment in word form for naturalness.

× Yeah, I have a long journey with my family when I was tall.

✓ Yeah, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child.

Tense and word choice problems: a past event should use past tense 'had' not 'have'. 'When I was tall' is incorrect idiom; use 'when I was a child' to indicate childhood.

× I remember that day I went to Germany and it is a long trip for me and I was so excited because I can't sort out on the traditional of the Germany and the Germany is my dream.

✓ I remember the day I went to Germany; it was a long trip for me and I was so excited because I couldn't get used to German traditions, and Germany was my dream.

Multiple errors: - Tense consistency: past events should use past tense 'it was' not 'it is'. - Modal/past ability: 'can't sort out on' is incorrect; use 'couldn't get used to' or 'couldn't figure out'. - Prepositions/articles: 'the traditional of the Germany' is wrong; use 'German traditions' without 'the' and correct adjective form. - Repetition/article: 'the Germany' is incorrect; use 'Germany'. The correction keeps all verbs in past tense and uses natural collocations.