Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. Keep answer under five sentences and add a brief specific reason with linking words. Correct common errors (e.g. “in the window” → “out the window”, “windows side” → “the window seat”). Use more natural phrasing: “I prefer the window seat” and give a concrete example of what you enjoy seeing.

예시: I prefer the window seat when I travel by bus because I enjoy looking out at the scenery. For example, watching rivers, fields and small villages passes by helps me relax and makes the journey more interesting.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like “uh” and correct tense and word choice (e.g. “I definitely had a long journey,” “we were travelling by train,” “we reached Mathura after two days”). Mention what made it memorable (activities, sights, feelings).

예시: Yes, I had a long family journey as a child. We travelled by train to Mathura and it took two days, so we spent a lot of time playing card games and looking out at the countryside, which made the trip fun and memorable.

× I definitely prefer to sit by the window when I am travelling by bus because I love to see outside view in the window and I more feel comfortable when I sit in windows side.

✓ I definitely prefer to sit by the window when I travel by bus because I love to see the view outside the window and I feel more comfortable when I sit by the window.

Errors involve present tense consistency and word order. Use simple present 'travel' for habitual actions rather than present continuous 'am travelling'. 'See outside view in the window' has incorrect word order and missing articles; correct to 'see the view outside the window'. 'I more feel comfortable' is ungrammatical; correct order is 'I feel more comfortable'. 'Windows side' should be 'by the window' or 'at the window'. Suggested improvement: use simple present for habitual preferences, place adjectives/adverbs in normal order (feel more comfortable), and include articles where required. Suggested grammar problem type ID: 6

× When I was a child, I definitely a long journey with my family.

✓ When I was a child, I definitely took a long journey with my family.

Missing past-tense verb. The sentence lacks the verb 'took' to indicate a completed action in the past. Use past tense 'took' for an action that happened when the speaker was a child. Suggested improvement: always include the correct past-tense verb for completed past events. Suggested grammar problem type ID: 5

× I went to win the one we were traveling by train.

✓ We went to a place and traveled by train.

This sentence is unclear and contains wrong word choices. 'I went to win the one' is nonsensical; likely intended meaning is 'We went somewhere and we were traveling by train.' Also tense should be past continuous 'we were traveling' for the journey in progress, or simple past 'we traveled'. Suggested rewrite clarifies meaning and maintains past tense consistency. Suggested grammar problem type ID: 5

× After two days, uh, we reached to Mathura.

✓ After two days, we reached Mathura.

Incorrect use of the preposition 'to' after 'reached'. 'Reach' does not require 'to' before a destination; use 'reached Mathura'. The action is a completed past event so past tense 'reached' is correct. Suggested improvement: do not add 'to' after 'reach' when naming the destination. Suggested grammar problem type ID: 5},{