Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms (e.g., 'when I travel'), remove redundancy ('every single views' → 'the views'), and give one or two specific examples. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences and add a linking word for coherence. Also correct articles and plurality ('a river', 'the view').

예시: Yes, I do. When I travel I usually sit by the window because I enjoy looking at the scenery; for example, I love seeing mountains and rivers pass by. It helps me relax and makes the journey more interesting.

제안: Reduce hesitation and improve detail: avoid filler sounds ('Uh'), use a clear past-tense narrative and add a specific detail (what you did or one memorable moment). Use linking words like 'during' or 'there' to connect ideas. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I did. When I was ten, my family and I spent four days in Singapore; during the trip we visited Sentosa Island and tried local food, which was a highlight for me.

× Yes I do, when I traveling I always sit by the window because I can see the every single views such as beautiful mountains or river or not like that.

✓ Yes, I do. When I travel, I always sit by the window because I can see every single view, such as beautiful mountains or rivers.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'traveling' after 'when I' should be simple present 'travel' to match habitual action; 'the every single views' has wrong article and plural form—use 'every single view' or 'every single one' but better 'every single view'; 'river' should be plural 'rivers' to match 'mountains' and generalize. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions (I travel), remove unnecessary 'the', keep noun number consistent, and use commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I did. Uh, when I was 10, we went to Singapore to travel. We stayed uh, for three to four days and we had a lot fun there.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was 10, we went to Singapore to travel. We stayed for three or four days and we had a lot of fun there.

Errors: 'three to four days' is understandable but 'three or four days' is more idiomatic; 'a lot fun' misses the preposition 'of' or should be 'a lot of fun'. Suggestions: use 'three or four days' for an approximate count and include 'of' after 'a lot' when used with a noun (a lot of fun). Keep past tense verbs consistent (was, went, stayed, had). Grammar problem type ID:5