Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Correct unclear phrases (e.g., “play safe to play speed”) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “sense of movement,” “scenery,” “landmarks”). Keep answer under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I enjoy it because I can watch the changing scenery and spot interesting landmarks as we move, which makes the journey more enjoyable. For example, on flights I like to see cloud formations and on buses I enjoy watching villages and fields pass by.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific details and a coherent ending. Use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “because,” “so”) and avoid trailing or incomplete sentences. Mention one or two vivid memories or reasons why it was enjoyable to make the answer more memorable.

예시: Yes, I had a memorable long journey with my family as a child. For example, when I was five we traveled from Luxembourg to Sweden by bus and ferry, and I remember watching coastal villages and playing games on the ferry. I enjoyed it because we spent a lot of time together and I saw many new places, which felt exciting and special.

× Yes, I love sitting by the window and travelling on airplanes and buses.

✓ Yes, I love sitting by the window and travelling on airplanes and buses.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses gerunds after 'love'. Keep as is.

× Travelling, umm, and sitting by the window gives you an open experience into what it feels like when you're moving from play safe to play speed.

✓ Travelling and sitting by the window give you an open sense of what it feels like when you're moving from a slow pace to a fast pace.

Original sentence has awkward phrasing and a subject-verb agreement issue: the compound subject 'Travelling and sitting' is plural and must take 'give' not 'gives' (related to subject-verb agreement, ID 27). Phrases 'open experience into' and 'play safe to play speed' are unidiomatic. Replace with 'open sense of' and 'from a slow pace to a fast pace' to convey meaning clearly. Suggestion: keep the compound subject plural, use natural collocations ('sense of'), and use clear comparative expressions ('slow pace', 'fast pace').

× Yeah, windows are often like an outlook towards what is happening outside.

✓ Yeah, windows often provide an outlook on what is happening outside.

'Like an outlook towards' is awkward and non-idiomatic. Use 'provide an outlook on' or 'offer a view of'. Also 'windows are often like' is wordy; 'windows often provide' is clearer and more direct. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× Yes, I did have a long journey with my family as a child.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is grammatically acceptable for emphasis but sounds unnecessary here. Prefer simple past 'had' for a natural reply. Also 'as a child' and 'when I was a child' are both correct; 'when I was a child' is slightly clearer.

× Once, when I was five years old, we travelled from Luxembourg to Sweden in a bus and also used other forms of transport like a ferry.

✓ Once, when I was five years old, we travelled from Luxembourg to Sweden by bus and also used other forms of transport, like a ferry.

Use 'by bus' instead of 'in a bus' for typical travel descriptions. Adding a comma before 'like a ferry' improves clarity. Tenses and verbs are correct (past simple) so only prepositional phrasing adjusted (fits ID 11 but primary issue is collocation with transport; however instruction 2 says only correct mistakes that meet list — changing preposition aligns with ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). Suggestion: use standard collocations 'by bus', 'by ferry', or 'on a ferry' consistently.

× I enjoyed that long journey, particularly because it was a very personal experience and I could see a lot of things while.

✓ I enjoyed that long journey, particularly because it was a very personal experience and I could see a lot of things along the way.

Ending the sentence with 'while' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Replace with 'along the way' or 'on the journey' to complete the thought. This fixes sentence structure and provides a natural idiomatic phrase.