Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. "because I can see..." not "because of I can't see...") and avoid irrelevant phrases ("I can't see our door" is unclear). Add one specific detail and a linking word to support the main idea. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I prefer the window seat when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For instance, seeing flowers, trees and changing landscapes helps me relax. As a result, I feel calmer and less anxious during the journey.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail or short anecdote. Use linking words (e.g. "often" or "for example") and correct tense/grammar ("We usually went to Sham Beach" is fine but follow with specific memories). Avoid short fragmented sentences; combine them for fluency.

예시: Yes, I often took long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, we usually went to Sham Beach, a beautiful spot near my city, where my brother and I would picnic on the sand. I remember we always brought homemade sandwiches and a radio, so those trips were both relaxing and fun.

× Yes I do, I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling because of I can't see our door and I can see flowers and trees.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling because I can see flowers and trees and I cannot see the aisle.

The original sentence had an incorrect phrase 'because of I can't see our door' which is ungrammatical. 'Because of' should be followed by a noun or noun phrase, not a clause; use 'because' before a clause. Also 'our door' is likely intended to be 'the aisle' or 'the door' of the plane/train; choose the correct noun. Use 'cannot' or 'can't' consistently and separate independent clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: use 'because I can...' or 'because of the view' and correct the noun for clarity. Note: This falls under Present tense issue because the clause structure and tense consistency in present continuous/simple were incorrect.

× It can make me feel better.

✓ It makes me feel better.

Using 'can' suggests possibility rather than a regular effect. The context states a habitual result of sitting by the window, so the simple present 'makes' is more appropriate to describe a general truth or habitual reaction. This is classified as Present tense issue because the tense/modal choice affected the meaning and regularity.

× For example I feel relaxed and calm.

✓ For example, I feel relaxed and calm.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma after 'For example' for correct punctuation and natural phrasing. The tense is correct (simple present) to describe a habitual or general feeling. Classified as Present tense issue because it relates to sentence-level presentation of habitual present.

× Yes I did. I always travel with my family and my brother.

✓ Yes, I did. I always traveled with my family and my brother when I was a child.

The student answered a question about childhood events (past). Mixing 'did' with 'always travel' (present) is inconsistent. Use the past tense 'traveled' and add a time reference 'when I was a child' to match the question. This is a Past tense issue because the verb tense must match the past context.

× We usually went to Sham Beach.

✓ We usually went to Sham Beach.

The original sentence is acceptable: 'usually went' correctly expresses habitual action in the past. No change needed except optional punctuation. Classified as Past tense issue because it refers to habitual past action.

× It was beautiful beach in my city.

✓ It was a beautiful beach in my city.

English requires an indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun 'beautiful beach'. The original omitted the article, causing an article error. Classification: Article errors.

× I always have some food or something to picnic.

✓ I always had some food or something for a picnic.

The question asks about childhood trips, so past tense 'had' should be used rather than present 'have'. Also, English uses the phrase 'for a picnic' rather than 'to picnic' in this context. This is a Past/Present tense issue and preposition/phrase choice; classified here as Present tense issue because the primary error is tense inconsistency with the context.