Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, correct grammar, and avoid contradictions (saying you prefer to sleep but also to see the view). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., 'traveling', 'sit', 'sleep', 'towering' is incorrect).

예시: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, on long train rides I like watching the mountains and villages pass by, which helps me relax and fall asleep more easily.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense. Begin with a clear yes/no response, then give a specific example or detail using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'but', 'for example'). Correct grammar: 'we rarely had long journeys', 'when we did, we spent a lot of time together'.

예시: Yes, we rarely had long journeys when I was a child, but when we did go on a trip we spent a lot of time together. For example, on one holiday we drove to the coast and spent three days visiting beaches and eating local food, which brought our family closer.

× I prefer to sleep by the window when I towering because I want to see the beautiful view outside and it feel kind when I see it.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I am travelling because I want to see the beautiful view outside and it feels nice when I see it.

The student used 'towering' incorrectly; the correct present participle of 'travel' is 'travelling' (or 'traveling' in American English) and it must be paired with an auxiliary verb 'am' for the progressive form (grammar type 10: verb in the present participle form). Also 'it feel kind' has subject-verb agreement and word choice issues: 'it' (singular) requires the verb 'feels' (adds -s) and 'kind' is not the correct adjective here; 'nice' or 'pleasant' fits better. Suggestion: use 'I am travelling' for the action in progress and 'it feels nice' for proper subject-verb agreement and natural adjective choice.

× I prefer to sleep by the window when I towering because I want to see the beautiful view outside and it feel kind when I see it.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I am travelling because I want to see the beautiful view outside and it feels nice when I see it.

The clause 'it feel kind' shows a third person singular issue (grammar type 2): the subject 'it' requires the verb form 'feels' not 'feel'. Also 'kind' is an odd collocation here; use 'nice' or 'pleasant'. Suggestion: change to 'it feels nice' to correct verb agreement and improve naturalness.

× Yes, we hardly to have a long journey but when we have journey we will take a time or spend a time with my family a lot.

✓ Yes, we hardly ever had long journeys, but when we did we spent a lot of time together as a family.

This sentence has multiple issues: 'hardly to have' is ungrammatical — use 'hardly ever had' for past frequency (grammar types 5 and 26: past tense issue and sentence structure errors). 'When we have journey' should be past tense 'when we did' or 'when we had journeys'. 'We will take a time or spend a time' mixes future with past and uses awkward expressions; 'we spent a lot of time together' is the natural past-tense phrasing. Also 'with my family a lot' is unidiomatic; 'together as a family' is clearer. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use natural collocations like 'hardly ever had long journeys' and 'spent a lot of time together'.

× Yes, we hardly to have a long journey but when we have journey we will take a time or spend a time with my family a lot.

✓ Yes, we hardly ever had long journeys, but when we did we spent a lot of time together as a family.

The phrase 'a long journey' and later 'have journey' show singular/plural and article problems (grammar type 1 and 22). English usually uses the plural 'long journeys' when speaking generally about repeated events. Also 'have journey' needs an article or plural form. Suggestion: use 'long journeys' for general past experiences and 'we did' to avoid repeating the noun awkwardly.