Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., tense agreement, articles, and redundant words).

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching sunrises and sunsets because the changing colors make the journey feel peaceful, and I sometimes pause to take photos or point out interesting views to my companions.

제안: Organize your response with a clear main sentence and support it with a specific reason and an example. Correct noun forms and tense (e.g., “scenery photos,” “they help me capture”). Use a linking word to connect ideas and avoid long, repetitive phrases.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because they help me capture moments like sunrise and sunset. For instance, I share my favorite shots with friends on social media and sometimes print them for an album.

제안: Begin directly with your preference, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, and). Fix grammar (use singular/plural agreement, correct prepositions) and avoid filler words like “more” repeated or “more pleasant as compared to.”

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea because the climate is cooler and more comfortable, and the scenery—such as moving clouds and mist—feels more dramatic. I also enjoy photographing these changing landscapes when I hike.

× Yes, definitely. I look out of the window during my entire travelling journey because it helped me to catch the beautiful moments of the view like the sunrise in the morning and sunset in the evening, which makes our journey more happy, more happy and joyful.

✓ Yes, definitely. I look out of the window for my entire journey because it helps me catch beautiful sights, such as the sunrise in the morning and the sunset in the evening, which make the journey happier and more joyful.

Errors: inconsistent tense and incorrect word forms. 'during my entire travelling journey' is wordy and uses unnecessary gerund; use 'for my entire journey'. 'helped me to catch' mixes past tense with present 'I look' so use present 'helps me catch' and omit 'to' after 'help' in this structure. 'beautiful moments of the view' is unnatural; use 'beautiful sights'. 'which makes our journey more happy, more happy and joyful' has repetition and adjective order; use 'which make the journey happier and more joyful' because the plural noun 'sights' requires plural verb 'make' and comparative 'happier' is correct. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (present simple) and simplify phrases for clarity.

× Yes, definitely. I take the sceneries photo outside the car window of the different views because it helped me to capture the various movements of the nature like sunrise and the sunset and I also share these photographs with my friends.

✓ Yes, definitely. I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because they help me capture the changing aspects of nature, like the sunrise and the sunset, and I also share these photographs with my friends.

Errors: plural and collocation issues and tense inconsistency. 'sceneries photo' is incorrect: use 'photos of the scenery' or 'scenery photos'. 'the different views' is redundant; simplify. 'it helped me to capture' mixes past with present; use present 'they help me capture' or 'they help me to capture'. 'various movements of the nature' is unnatural; use 'changing aspects of nature'. Also ensure pronoun agreement: 'photos' -> 'they'. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns and keep present tense consistent.

× Moreover, I prefer the mountains rather than a sea because the climate on the mountains are more pleasant as compared to the sea and there are beautiful views on of the nature seen on the mountains like clouds and I also like to capture the photos of these movements.

✓ Moreover, I prefer the mountains to the sea because the climate in the mountains is more pleasant compared to the sea, and there are beautiful views of nature on the mountains, like clouds. I also like to photograph these scenes.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'rather than a sea' should be 'prefer X to Y' and 'a sea' should be 'the sea' or just 'sea'; 'the climate on the mountains are' has subject-verb agreement and wrong preposition: use 'the climate in the mountains is'. 'as compared to' is wordy; use 'compared to' or 'than'. 'beautiful views on of the nature seen on the mountains' has extra words and wrong prepositions; use 'beautiful views of nature on the mountains'. 'capture the photos of these movements' is awkward; use 'photograph these scenes'. Suggestion: fix prepositions, use correct article, ensure subject-verb agreement, and simplify phrasing.