Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple), remove redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Watch word order (sit by the window) and avoid unnecessary words like “should” in this context.

예시: Yes. I usually sit by the window because I love watching the passing scenery, especially on long journeys. For example, on a five-hour bus trip I enjoy seeing changing landscapes and small villages along the road.

제안: Organize the response: give a clear topic sentence, then explain and give a reason. Fix grammar (use plural/singular correctly), improve word choice (photo quality, phone vs camera) and use linking words (but, because). Keep it to 2–4 sentences and be specific about examples.

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, but they are usually low quality because I use my phone. If I had a proper camera, I think the pictures would be much clearer and capture more detail.

제안: Begin with a direct statement of preference, then add specific supporting details and link them logically. Correct grammar and sentence fragments, avoid fillers like “You know what,” and ensure coherence. Give a brief example of why you prefer mountains (scenery, climate, activities).

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy peaceful scenery and cooler weather. For example, on a recent trip to Nan Province in northern Thailand, I loved watching terraced hills and misty valleys from the car window, which felt very relaxing.

× Yes I do, I always should see that seats by the window because I love to watch in the scenery of the view, especially when I travel a long trip.

✓ Yes, I do. I always try to sit in the seats by the window because I love to look at the scenery, especially when I travel on a long trip.

Errors: 'should see that seats' is incorrect pronoun and modal usage; 'that' should be 'the' or removed; 'see' should be 'sit' to match meaning; 'watch in the scenery of the view' is incorrect phrasing and pronoun use—'look at the scenery' is natural; 'when I travel a long trip' needs preposition 'on'. Suggestion: replace incorrect pronoun and verbs with appropriate verbs and prepositions to make the sentence natural and grammatical. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I usually take the photo of the scenery when I have a trip and sit on the car, but the qualities of the photo have not that much nice quality because I take on my phone. I wish I had my phone, my own camera it would be.

✓ I usually take photos of the scenery when I travel and sit in the car, but the photos are not very good because I take them on my phone. I wish I had my own camera.

Errors: 'the photo' should be plural 'photos' for general habit (article error and pluralization); 'have a trip' is unnatural—use 'travel'; 'sit on the car' uses wrong preposition and article—use 'sit in the car'; 'the qualities of the photo have not that much nice quality' is ungrammatical—use 'the photos are not very good' (article and adjective/adverb correction); 'I wish I had my phone, my own camera it would be' is ungrammatical and redundant—use 'I wish I had my own camera'. Suggestions: use correct articles, plural forms for habitual actions, correct prepositions, and simplify redundant clauses. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Actually, I prefer the mountain.

✓ Actually, I prefer the mountains.

Error: 'the mountain' refers to a single feature, but the question contrasts mountains and the sea in general—use plural 'mountains' to match meaning. Suggestion: use plural when speaking about a category or preference in general. Grammar problem type ID:1

× You know what, I just went through the trip to the mountain to from the northern regions in Thailand.

✓ You know what, I just went on a trip to the mountains in the northern region of Thailand.

Errors: 'went through the trip' is unnatural; correct collocation is 'went on a trip'. 'to the mountain to from' is confused word order and extra prepositions. 'the northern regions' can be 'the northern region' or 'northern regions' depending on meaning; use 'in the northern region of Thailand' for clarity. Suggestion: use common collocations ('go on a trip') and correct preposition order. Grammar problem_type ID:26

× It's called Nan Province. It's surrounded by the mountains.

✓ It's called Nan Province. It is surrounded by mountains.

Error: 'surrounded by the mountains' implies specific mountains; it's more natural to say 'surrounded by mountains' when speaking generally. This is a minor article/there-be nuance. Suggestion: drop the definite article when referring to mountains in general. Grammar problem_type ID:3

× When I went there. I really love the scenery out from the my window. I'll wait to the.

✓ When I went there, I really loved the scenery outside my window. I can't wait to go back.

Errors: sentence fragment 'When I went there.' should be joined to the main clause; tense inconsistency: 'I really love' should be past 'I really loved' because 'went' is past. 'scenery out from the my window' has incorrect prepositions and an extra article—use 'scenery outside my window'. 'I'll wait to the.' is incomplete and ungrammatical; likely intended 'I can't wait to go back' or 'I'll wait to go again'. Suggestion: ensure complete sentences, maintain tense consistency, correct prepositions and articles, and complete the final thought. Grammar problem type ID:26