Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời chưa rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi diễn đạt; cần trả lời trực tiếp, mạch lạc, hạn chế tiếng ngập ngừng và sửa ngữ pháp. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + lý do chính), sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể bằng liên từ (because, so, for example). Tránh dùng từ không chính xác (ví dụ “dance”) và sửa cấu trúc câu như “when I travel to a new place” thay cho “somewhere in Vietnam, is it so new for me?”.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the window because it helps me learn about a new place. For example, when I visit a city I like to see the architecture and busy streets, and when I go to the countryside I enjoy watching farms and green fields.

제안: Nội dung lặp lại, thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý không rõ. Trả lời cần ngắn gọn, trực tiếp: bắt đầu bằng câu khẳng định, lý do rõ ràng, và một ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ (because, so, for example) để liên kết ý và sửa các cụm từ không chính xác (ví dụ “take their picture” → “take pictures of the scenery”).

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside. I usually do this because I want to keep memories of the places I visit. For example, when I travel abroad I take pictures of landmarks and landscapes so I can look back on my trips later.

제안: Câu trả lời rời rạc, dùng từ sai và cấu trúc lủng củng. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer..., or I like both...), giải thích lý do với cấu trúc mạch lạc và sử dụng liên từ (because, so). Tránh cụm từ không chính xác (“good point of death” không hợp lý). Nên nêu thời gian hoặc ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ lựa chọn.

예시: I like both the mountains and the sea for different reasons. I prefer the sea in summer because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach, but I choose the mountains in winter or spring for hiking and enjoying fresh, cool air.

× Yes, I do because I dance, uh, when I travel to a new country or somewhere in Vietnam, is it so new for me? So I want to see more about the, the views of the city or in the countryside or something. And I feel it is so interesting for me.

✓ Yes, I do because I get excited when I travel to a new country or to a new place in Vietnam. I want to see more of the city's or countryside's views, and I find it very interesting.

The original contains unclear and awkward phrases ('I dance' likely intended as 'I get excited'; 'somewhere in Vietnam, is it so new for me?' is ungrammatical). This is a sentence structure and clarity issue. Suggestion: replace idiomatic or wrong words with clear verbs (get excited, new place), combine short fragments into coherent sentences, and use correct prepositional forms ('see more of', 'city's or countryside's views').

× Yes, I do. Do you know like when I come to a new country or somewhere I know it is trouble for one time or just a few time. So I think I want to take their picture to say that in my phones like sometime I can, to say that to know all I have to travel this year and to have a memory about this one.

✓ Yes, I do. When I visit a new country or place, I sometimes have only a brief time there, so I like to take pictures with my phone to remember the trip.

The original is run-on and uses incorrect words ('trouble for one time', 'take their picture', 'to say that to know all'). This is sentence structure and word choice problems. Suggestion: express ideas simply and logically: state limited time, purpose of photos, and use correct collocations ('take pictures with my phone', 'remember the trip').

× I think I want to prefer both mountains or sea.

✓ I think I prefer both the mountains and the sea.

Incorrect preposition/conjunction and word choice: 'prefer' pairs with 'to' or 'and' when listing options, and 'both' should pair with 'and'. Also include definite article 'the' for general preferences. Suggestion: use 'prefer both A and B' and include 'the' when talking about general natural features.

× It will be had their, uh, the good point of death.

✓ They each have their own advantages.

Original is ungrammatical and uses wrong words ('will be had', 'good point of death'). This is a sentence structure and word choice error. Suggestion: use a simple present statement to express general truth: 'They each have their own advantages' or 'Each has its own good points.'

× So if possible to go for travel, I will be, uh, go see for in the summer and mountain for in the winter, winter or in spring because it's a good season.

✓ If possible, I will travel to the sea in the summer and to the mountains in the winter or spring because those are good seasons for each.

The original mixes incorrect infinitive and verb forms ('to go for travel', 'I will be, uh, go see for', 'mountain for in the winter'). This is a tense and verb form issue and sentence structure problem. Suggestion: use 'If possible, I will' plus base verb 'travel', use 'to the sea'/'to the mountains', and place time expressions ('in the summer', 'in the winter or spring') correctly.