Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用词和语法要更准确，句子要更自然并控制长度（不超过5句）。在开头直接回应问题，接着用一两句具体细节支持观点，注意动词形式和搭配。可以用连词使句子更连贯，例如 because/of course/so. 同时避免冗长重复（如“look outside and watch”可合并）。

예시: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window to enjoy the landscape, especially trees and mountains, because the view helps reduce visual and mental fatigue. For example, seeing green fields and hills always makes me feel calmer during long journeys.

제안: 注意名词和动词搭配、冠词使用以及更紧凑的表达。先直接回答，再提供一两条具体细节并用连接词衔接。避免冗余词汇（例如“really”反复出现）。

예시: Yes, I do. I keep a photo album dedicated to landscapes and especially enjoy photographing the sky, because watching clouds and colours is very relaxing. For instance, I often take pictures at sunrise or sunset to capture vivid colours.

제안: 回答要更简洁并纠正语法错误与用词（例如“it's depends”应为“it depends”，“ice fatigue”不恰当，应为“eye strain”或“eye fatigue”）。先给出总体立场（it depends），然后用两句简短具体原因比较山与海。注意时态和搭配。

예시: It depends on how I feel. If my eyes are strained, I prefer the mountains because the green scenery soothes my eyes; but if the weather is sunny, I prefer the sea to enjoy the sunshine and fresh air.

× Yes, I really enjoy look outside and watch the landscape and especially the trees and mountains because I think it can help me reduce the visual and mental fatigue.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy looking outside and watching the landscape, especially the trees and mountains, because I think it can help me reduce visual and mental fatigue.

错误类型：动词 + -ing 形式。原句中在动词 enjoy 之后应使用动名词（-ing），因此应改为 looking 和 watching；另外对可数/不可数名词和标点稍作调整，使句子更自然流畅。建议：在 enjoy、like、avoid 等动词后使用动名词。

× Yes, I really like it and I even develop a album especially for collecting the landscape and I particularly enjoy capturing the sky because I think it is really relaxing.

✓ Yes, I really like it and I even developed an album especially for collecting landscapes, and I particularly enjoy capturing the sky because I think it is really relaxing.

错误类型：冠词和时态问题（此处以冠词为主）。原句中 a album 应为 an album，因为 album 以元音音素开头；另外 combine 时态与语境更自然地使用过去式 developed（如果指已做的事）。同时 landscape 作复数更自然。建议：在以元音音素开头的单词前使用 an；注意名词单复数与时态一致。

× Well, I think it's depends.

✓ Well, I think it depends.

错误类型：现在时态/主谓搭配。原句中主语 it 与动词 depends 不需要缩写 it is（it's）加上 depends；正确用法为 'I think it depends.' 建议：使用固定表达 'I think it depends.' 而不是 'I think it's depends.'。

× If sometime I feel that my eyes are strained, I would prefer going to the mountain and watching the greenery which can help me relieve the ice fatigue.

✓ If sometimes I feel that my eyes are strained, I would prefer going to the mountains and watching the greenery, which can help me relieve the eye fatigue.

错误类型：副词位置及拼写和单复数问题。原句中 sometime 应为 sometimes（表示有时）；mountain 更自然用复数 the mountains；ice fatigue 拼写错误，应为 eye fatigue（眼睛疲劳）。建议：副词 sometimes 放在条件从句开头合适；注意单复数和拼写准确。

× But if sometimes the weather is good, I would like to go to the sea and then enjoy the sunshine.

✓ But if the weather is good sometimes, I would like to go to the sea and enjoy the sunshine.

错误类型：现在时态/副词位置。原句中 sometimes 放在 if 后显得不自然，改为 'if the weather is good sometimes' 或 'if sometimes the weather is good' 更自然；去掉 then 更简洁流畅。建议：将副词 sometimes 放在句中合适位置，保持表达简洁。