Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Correct grammar and avoid redundant phrases (e.g. "see window"). Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy observing the landscape, especially in hill stations where I can see mountains and rivers. For instance, last year I watched rolling green hills and a winding river for most of the journey.

제안: Start with a direct yes/no, then explain briefly with specific examples. Fix grammar (e.g. "I love nature" not "nature person"). Avoid vague endings and keep within 3–4 sentences max.

예시: Yes, I do. I often photograph animals, plants and flowers from the car window because nature relaxes me. For example, on a recent trip I captured a herd of deer and several wildflowers, which made the journey much more enjoyable.

제안: Answer clearly (mountains or sea), then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "however" correctly.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For example, when I visit a hill station I explore different trails and take many photographs of the peaks. However, I also enjoy the sea occasionally for relaxing on the beach.

× Well, I am fond of travelling to explore new places because I got a chance during travelling to see window and I can see through the view of nature such as in a hill station there are various mountains or rivers.

✓ Well, I am fond of travelling to explore new places because I get a chance during travel to look out of the window and see views of nature; for example, at a hill station there are various mountains and rivers.

Errors: inconsistent tense ('got' should be present 'get' to match 'am fond' and the habitual context); incorrect noun form and preposition ('during travelling' -> 'during travel' or 'while travelling'); awkward phrase 'see window' -> 'look out of the window' or 'look through the window'; 'see through the view of nature' is unidiomatic -> 'see views of nature'; run-on sentence and incorrect conjunctions. Suggestion: use consistent present/habitual tense, correct prepositions, and split or punctuate long sentences for clarity.

× Yes, absolutely. I take a lot of photos of the scenery by the car window because I love nature person and I took photograph of animals, plants and flowers which make me feel lighter and more comfortable as well as.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I take a lot of photos of the scenery from the car window because I love nature, and I take photographs of animals, plants, and flowers which make me feel relaxed and more comfortable.

Errors: inconsistent verb tense ('took' -> should be present 'take' to match 'I take a lot of photos'); incorrect noun phrase 'nature person' -> 'nature' or 'a nature lover'; 'by the car window' -> idiomatic 'from the car window'; 'photograph' count/noun form -> 'photographs'; 'lighter' is wrong adjective for feeling relaxed -> use 'relaxed'; trailing 'as well as' is incomplete. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same habitual present tense, use correct noun phrases, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× I usually prefer to see mountains. Whenever I go to hill station I get a chance to explore new places and I took many photographs of mountains. However, I when I go on vacation I also see.

✓ I usually prefer to see mountains. Whenever I go to a hill station I get a chance to explore new places and I take many photographs of the mountains. However, when I go on vacation I also visit the sea sometimes.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('took' -> 'take' to match habitual present 'usually prefer' and 'get'); missing article ('go to hill station' -> 'go to a hill station'); awkward/incomplete final clause ('I also see' is incomplete) -> clarify as 'I also visit the sea sometimes'. Suggestion: maintain present habitual tense, include necessary articles, and complete thoughts for clarity.