Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar (use present simple: 'I travel' or 'I'm travelling'), avoid repetition, and make supporting details specific and coherent. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two linked supporting points with appropriate linking words (for example, 'for instance' or 'because'). Also correct vocabulary ('scenery' rather than 'scenario', 'greenery' not 'G greenery').

예시: Yes. I often look out of the window when I travel by car because I find the scenery relaxing and it helps me pass the time. For example, I like watching changes in architecture and areas of greenery, which make me feel connected to the places I pass through.

제안: Correct grammar (remove article errors: 'take photos' or 'take a photo'), avoid repetition of phrases, and organize supporting detail with a linking phrase. Be specific about how often and why, and give one clear example instead of repeating. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the sky, mountains or farmland when I see a nice view because photographs help me remember my trips. For instance, yesterday I took a photo of a bright rainbow from the car window.

제안: Make a clear direct answer first ('I prefer the mountains' or 'I prefer the sea'), then give one or two clear reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid hesitation noises and repetition, and correct unclear phrases ('generally relaxing' not 'general generally'). Keep sentences short and specific.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I find them more peaceful and refreshing. For example, I enjoy hiking and the quiet atmosphere, whereas the sea feels busier and less restful to me.

× Yes, I often look at the window when I traveling by car because I find watching the passing scenario relaxing and a good way to pass the time.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window when I am traveling by car because I find watching the passing scenery relaxing and a good way to pass the time.

The verb form after 'when' requires a finite verb for a time clause: 'when I traveling' is missing the auxiliary 'am' (present continuous). Also 'look at the window' is less natural than 'look out of the window' and 'scenario' should be 'scenery' for landscape context. Suggestion: use 'when I am traveling' for correct present continuous time clause and 'scenery' for landscape description.

× For example, I enjoy I enjoy nothing changes in architecture and G greenery which helps me I feel connected to the places I pass through.

✓ For example, I enjoy that nothing changes in architecture and greenery, which helps me feel connected to the places I pass through.

The original repeats 'I enjoy' and has extra letters and misplaced pronoun 'me' before 'feel'. The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a noun clause 'that nothing changes...' or a gerund phrase. Remove the repeated fragment and the stray 'G' and place commas correctly. Suggestion: write 'I enjoy that nothing changes in architecture and greenery' or 'I enjoy the unchanged architecture and greenery' and use 'which helps me feel' (not 'helps me I feel').

× Yes, I often take a photos of the view of the sky or mountains or just farmland and for instance, for instance yesterday I took a photo of a rainbow.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the sky, mountains, or farmland; for instance, yesterday I took a photo of a rainbow.

'a photos' is incorrect because 'photos' is plural while 'a' is singular. Remove the extra 'for instance' repetition and streamline the list using commas. Suggestion: use 'take photos' for general habitual action and 'yesterday I took a photo' for a specific past instance.

× Well, I definitely choose mountains overseas because I find general generally relaxing in the mountains, but I don't feel, uh, I don't feel the the same as mount as sea in the mountains.

✓ Well, I definitely choose mountains when traveling abroad because I generally find them relaxing, but I don't feel the same about the sea.

'choose mountains overseas' is awkward; 'when traveling abroad' or 'when overseas' is clearer. 'I find general generally relaxing' duplicates and misplaces words; use 'I generally find them relaxing.' The latter clause is confused and repetitive; 'I don't feel the same as mount as sea in the mountains' is ungrammatical. Clarify to 'I don't feel the same about the sea.' Suggestion: avoid repetition, use 'generally' before the verb phrase, and replace unclear comparisons with 'about the sea.'