Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more specific and avoid vague phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete supporting details and use a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes — I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes like rice fields, forests and rivers because they help me relax after a busy day. In addition, seeing seasonal changes reminds me of local traditions and festivals.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence then expand with a reason and a brief example. Use a linking word to connect ideas and be more specific about your habit.

예시: No, I usually don't take photos of scenery from the car. Instead, I prefer to enjoy the moment because taking pictures through a window often ruins the view. For instance, on a recent trip the reflections on the glass and motion blur meant the photos were disappointing.

제안: Answer directly by choosing one or explaining a balanced preference, then give specific reasons and a short example. Avoid vague statements and use linking words to connect reasons.

예시: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains for relaxation because they are quieter and offer hiking trails. However, I also enjoy the sea for weekends since swimming and the fresh air lift my mood; for example, I recharge on a beach day and clear my head on a mountain hike.

× Yes, I love looking out the window when traveling by bus or car because it makes me appreciate nature and life as a whole.

✓ Yes, I love looking out the window when traveling by bus or car because they make me appreciate nature and life as a whole.

Subject 'bus or car' is compound and plural in meaning; the singular verb 'makes' disagrees. This is a subject-verb agreement/present tense issue: use plural verb 'make' or replace 'it' with plural pronoun 'they'. Also 'it' is ambiguous; changing to 'they' clarifies reference. Suggestion: use 'they make me appreciate...' or 'this makes me appreciate...' if referring to the act of looking.

× I usually don't, as I tend to appreciate scenery as my own rather than taking pictures of it.

✓ I usually don't, as I tend to appreciate the scenery myself rather than take pictures of it.

The phrase 'appreciate scenery as my own' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use the reflexive/adverbial 'myself' for emphasis and switch 'taking' to base form 'take' after 'rather than' when contrasting actions of the same subject. This fixes verb form usage and clarity.

× I prefer both of them because it makes life so beautiful if you appreciate both of them.

✓ I prefer both because they make life so beautiful if you appreciate them.

Using 'both of them' is wordy; 'both' suffices. The pronoun 'it' is singular while referring to two things, causing subject-verb disagreement. Replace with plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'make'. Also remove repetitive 'both of them' to improve naturalness.