Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğal fakat dilbilgisi ve akıcılık geliştirilmelidir. Kısa, doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra bağlaçlar kullanarak örnekler verin. Fiil yapılarına dikkat edin (örneğin "when I travel", "I see"), ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın. Ayrıca cümleleri 3–4 kısa cümleyle sınırlandırın.

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching buildings, lights and trees because they spark my imagination. For example, I sometimes make up stories about the houses I see, which makes the journey more enjoyable.

제안: Cevap net ama daha akıcı ve organize olabilir. Kısa bağlaçlar kullanarak neden fotoğraf çektiğinizi belirtin (örneğin "because" veya "for example") ve maddeleme yerine akıcı cümlelerle örnekler verin. Kelime seçimine dikkat edin (örneğin "sea view" yerine "the sea" veya "seascape").

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially when I see the sea or a beautiful park. I also photograph large trees and interesting cloud formations because they look great later on my phone or social media. For example, last weekend I photographed a dramatic sky over a park and shared it with friends.

제안: Cevap kısa ve anlamı belli olsa da dilbilgisi ve ifade geliştirilmeli. Doğrudan tercih cümlenizi kurun, sonra nedenini en az bir bağlaçla açıklayın. Doğru yapı: "it makes me feel peaceful" veya "it gives me peace" gibi ifadeler kullanın. Cümle sayısını 2–3 ile sınırlayın ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın.

예시: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel peaceful and relaxed. The sound of waves and the open view help me unwind after a busy week, so I usually choose the seaside for a holiday.

× I do when I traveling by bus and even car.

✓ I do when I am traveling by bus or even by car.

Incorrect use of the present participle: after the auxiliary 'am' the present participle 'traveling' is correct. The original sentence omitted the auxiliary verb 'am'. Also use 'by car' and 'or' to connect alternatives. Suggestion: include the correct form of the verb 'to be' (am) for the present continuous and use 'or' and 'by' before 'car'. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× I always look outside and seeing the environment, buildings, the lights, trees and imagine something when I see them.

✓ I always look outside, see the surroundings, buildings, lights, and trees, and imagine things when I see them.

Parallel structure and verb form issue: when listing actions joined by 'and', use base form verbs for parallelism (look, see, imagine) rather than mixing 'see' with 'seeing'. 'Environment' can be better as 'surroundings', and 'things' is more natural than 'something' here. Use commas for clarity. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× Yes I do, when I see a sea view I always take a photo and also a park.

✓ Yes I do. When I see a sea view or a park, I always take a photo.

Run-on sentence and coordination issue: the original combines clauses awkwardly with commas. Separate into two sentences or use a subordinating conjunction. Use 'or' to indicate alternatives ('sea view or a park') and place commas appropriately. This improves clarity and flow. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× Big trees and the clouds, I absolutely take a photo of them.

✓ I always take photos of big trees and clouds.

Awkward word order and article use: starting with 'Big trees and the clouds' then adding 'I absolutely take a photo of them' is unnatural. Use a simple subject-verb-object order: 'I take photos of...'. Use plural 'photos' and remove unnecessary 'the' before 'clouds'. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× I always prefer sea because it's make me, it feels me peace so.

✓ I always prefer the sea because it makes me feel peaceful.

Incorrect verb form and pronoun usage: 'it's make me' is incorrect; use 'it makes me' (third person singular present). 'Feels me peace' is incorrect English; use 'makes me feel peaceful' or 'gives me peace'. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'sea' when speaking generally about the sea as a preference. Rearranged 'so' is unnecessary. Note: Explanation in English as requested.