Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子不够连贯，语法和词汇使用有错误，表达重复。建议先用一句主题句直接回答，然后用1-2句具体细节支持，注意时态和单复数，避免冗余。可以使用连接词如 because / so / for example 来增强逻辑。举例说明具体看到的事物（people walking, shop windows, street signs）并解释为什么喜欢观景。

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I like watching people and everyday street life. For example, I often notice shopfronts opening in the morning and people walking to work, which helps me understand how the city wakes up.

제안: 语法结构有明显错误（主谓不一致、动词形式错误）且表达略显混乱。建议先一句直接回答（Yes/No），然后用一两句具体说明拍摄的对象和原因，使用正确的动词形式和连接词（for example, because, when）。描述要具体（sunrise, rain on the road, reflections）并说明感受。

예시: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I like to capture fleeting moments on the road. For example, I sometimes photograph the sunrise or raindrops on the pavement because they create a beautiful, atmospheric scene.

제안: 表达不清且多处语法错误，逻辑混乱。建议先直接回答（I prefer the sea），然后给出两条具体理由并用连接词（because, although, while）衔接。注意动词时态和形容词使用，用更准确的词（breeze, relaxed, difficult）。避免无意义的重复。

예시: I prefer the sea because walking on the beach is much easier than hiking steep mountain paths. Also, the sea breeze makes me feel relaxed and free, so I enjoy spending time by the coast.

× Yes I do. I love looking out of windows when I'm traveling by car or bus because I love to see the streets with people lacking walking through it and snap it because and I won't always look out to watch the shops which are opening. I think it's the way I learn about.

✓ Yes, I do. I love looking out of windows when I'm traveling by car or bus because I love to see people walking along the streets and to take photos. I also often look out to watch the shops that are open. I think it's a way I learn about places.

句子中多处动名词/不定式及短语使用不当：1) “people lacking walking through it” 用法错误，正确应为“people walking along the streets”（用现在分词作伴随状语，表示正在发生的动作）；2) “snap it” 更自然地用不定式短语“to take photos”或动名词“taking photos”；3) “which are opening” 描述商店处于营业状态，应使用过去分词或现在分词结构“that are open”或“that are opening”，但此处用“open”更合适。建议：掌握动名词与不定式的区别，使用现在分词表示正在发生的动作，使用不定式表示目的。

× There often takes photos out of the windows of the car because I love to catching some moments on the roads and I like to see the sun, sunrise and rainfall turning down on the roads. I think it's has a interesting atmosphere. I really love it.

✓ I often take photos out of the car window because I love capturing moments on the road, and I like to see the sun, sunrise, and rain falling on the road. I think it has an interesting atmosphere. I really love it.

句子结构混乱：1) “There often takes photos” 句型错误，应为“I often take photos”（主语+谓语）；2) “love to catching” 不正确，动词后应接不定式或动名词但不可混用，改为“love capturing”或“love to capture”；3) “rainfall turning down on the roads” 不通顺，改为“rain falling on the road”；4) “it's has a interesting atmosphere” 同时用了两个谓语，且冠词使用错误，应为“It has an interesting atmosphere”。建议：保持主语与谓语一致，避免多余助动词，掌握不定式与动名词的规范用法，并用正确的名词短语表达。

× I think I prefer to the sea because when I was walk around the mountains, the road in on the mountain is hard to walk.

✓ I think I prefer the sea because when I walk around the mountains, the roads on the mountain are hard to walk on.

介词和搭配错误：1) “prefer to the sea” 应为“prefer the sea” 或 “prefer going to the sea”，不加“to”或用动名词短语；2) “when I was walk” 时态和形式错误，应为“when I walk” 或 “when I was walking”；3) “the road in on the mountain is hard to walk” 介词冗余且位置错误，常用表达为“roads on the mountain are hard to walk on”。建议：注意动词时态一致，使用正确介词（on/ in/ to）并放在短语末尾时保持自然搭配。

× I feel it's when I was walking around the city. I feel relaxed when the winds Browns to me and I feel free and relaxed but on it.

✓ I feel it's different from when I was walking around the city. I feel relaxed when the wind blows on me, and I feel free and relaxed there.

时态与动词形式错误：1) 原句“it's when I was walking around the city” 表意模糊，需明确比较关系，改为“it's different from when I was walking around the city”；2) “winds Browns to me” 拼写与形式错误，应为“the wind blows on me”；3) “but on it” 不自然，改为“there”或“at the seaside”。建议：注意过去进行时与一般现在时的区别，确保动词拼写正确，使用恰当的地点副词（there）表示位置对比。