Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体自然但略显犹豫与重复（“it's, uh, it's”）。可更直接开门见山，用一两句具体细节支持观点并使用连接词，使表达更流畅有逻辑。注意控制句子数量不超过五句。

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window rather than at my phone because seeing the passing landscape is an important part of the journey. For example, I like watching changing architecture and countryside scenes, which helps me relax and notice local life. Also, it often gives me ideas for places I want to visit later.

제안: 回答清晰且有合理原因和条件句，语言连贯。可再加一两个具体例子（如某次经历）或使用更多连接词，使内容更具体生动。保持简洁。

예시: Sometimes I take photos, but I usually avoid shooting through the window because reflections and glare often ruin the picture. For instance, on a recent trip the glass caused glare so I asked the driver to stop at a viewpoint and took several clear shots of the valley, which turned out much better.

제안: 观点明确且带有原因，但表达可更自然和具体。避免模糊短语（如“in my mind”），用更地道的描述并提供具体细节或比较（例如举例说明海带来的感受或对比山的特点）。

예시: I prefer the sea because its wide horizon and gentle waves help me feel calm and relaxed. Compared with the mountains, which feel invigorating and dramatic, the sea gives me a sense of peace and makes it easier to unwind after a busy week.

× Sure, I enjoy looking out the window at the scenery instead of looking at the phone because I think it's, uh, it's an important part of the traveling.

✓ Sure, I enjoy looking out the window at the scenery instead of looking at my phone because I think it's an important part of traveling.

错误类型：动名词/动词-ing 以及冠词使用。说明：原句中使用“the phone”与习惯表达不够自然，通常说“my phone”。另外“the traveling”中 travel 作抽象名词时不需要定冠词，且更自然的表达是“traveling”。建议：用“my phone”代替“the phone”，并将“the traveling”改为“traveling”。另外保持动名词“looking”用法正确。

× Sometimes I will, but I usually avoid taking photos through the car window because reflection and glare often make the pictures blurred.

✓ Sometimes I will, but I usually avoid taking photos through the car window because reflections and glare often make the pictures blur or blurred.

错误类型：过去分词/形容词用法问题。说明：原句中“make the pictures blurred”语法可接受但不太自然。更自然的说法是“make the pictures blur”（使图片变得模糊，动词不定式/原形补语）或“make the pictures blurry”（用形容词）。同时“reflection”应为复数“reflections”更常见，因为通常有多处反光。建议：将“reflection”改为“reflections”，并把“make the pictures blurred”改为“make the pictures blur”或“make the pictures blurry”。

× If the view is really stunning, I might stop the car to take the clearer shot.

✓ If the view is really stunning, I might stop the car to take a clearer shot.

错误类型：现在时/冠词使用。说明：原句中“the clearer shot”在此处不太合适，因为并没有特指某一张已知的照片，应该使用不定冠词“a clearer shot”。建议：将“the clearer shot”改为“a clearer shot”。

× Both of them are wonderful, but I prefer the sea because when I enjoy the scenery, the expanse of the sea may make me calm and peaceful in my mind.

✓ Both are wonderful, but I prefer the sea because when I enjoy the scenery, the expanse of the sea makes me feel calm and peaceful.

错误类型：现在时/句子结构和动词搭配。说明：原句中“两者都很棒”用“Both of them are”虽可，但更简洁常用“Both are”。此外“may make me calm and peaceful in my mind”不太地道，动词搭配应为“make me feel calm and peaceful”，并且使用一般现在时“makes”更符合事实陈述。建议：把“Both of them are wonderful”改为“Both are wonderful”，将谓语改为“makes me feel calm and peaceful”。