Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, fix verb agreement and word choice, and add one specific detail using a linking phrase. Aim for 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so".

예시: Yes. I often look out the window when travelling by bus or car because I find the greenery and natural views calming. For example, I like watching fields and trees pass by because it helps me relax after a busy day.

제안: Correct word choice and sentence cohesion. Begin with a direct answer, then use a linking word to add a specific reason and one short example. Replace vague words and avoid repeating "love" too often.

예시: Yes, I often photograph scenery outside the car window because I want to capture unusual views I don't see every day. For instance, I once took photos of a striking sunset over farmland and later shared them on social media.

제안: Provide a clear, direct preference statement, correct singular/plural forms, and support it with a concise specific reason and a linking phrase such as "because" or "so". Keep to 2 sentences and avoid awkward phrases like "what is below that point of view."

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking to high viewpoints and taking in wide, panoramic landscapes. For example, reaching a summit and seeing valleys spread out below makes me feel peaceful and accomplished.

× Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because I really enjoy and loves to see the greeneries around and in nature.

✓ Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because I really enjoy seeing the greenery around and in nature.

The original sentence mixes verb forms: 'enjoy and loves' is incorrect because 'enjoy' is first person and should not be paired with 'loves' (third person singular). Also 'enjoy seeing' is the correct verb + -ing construction after 'enjoy' (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'Greeneries' is incorrect pluralization; the uncountable noun 'greenery' should be used (Grammar Problem Type 1). Use 'seeing' instead of 'to see' for natural collocation after 'enjoy'. Suggestions: use one verb form consistent with the subject ('I enjoy'), follow 'enjoy' with a gerund ('seeing'), and use 'greenery' as an uncountable noun.

× It gives me peace and and while looking at the window it is my time to like.

✓ It gives me peace, and while looking out the window it is my time to relax.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confused in structure (Grammar Problem Type 26). It repeats 'and', misuses 'while' clause, and 'my time to like' is incorrect word choice. 'Looking out the window' is the correct prepositional phrase (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Relax' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: combine clauses with a comma and use a clear verb that expresses the intended sense.

× Yes, I do take photos of the series outside the car window, whatever I see, extraordinary sceneries or nature that I would not see every day.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside the car window—whatever I see, extraordinary views or aspects of nature that I would not see every day.

'Series' is the wrong word; the intended noun is 'scenery' or 'scenes' (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'Sceneries' is nonstandard; use 'scenery' or 'views' (Grammar Problem Type 1/13). The sentence benefits from clearer noun choice: 'views' or 'aspects of nature'. Suggestion: use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun or 'views'/'scenes' as countable alternatives, and replace 'series' with the correct word.

× And I love to post it in social media to share to everyone what I saw and I love to document.

✓ And I love to post them on social media to share with everyone what I saw, and I like to document it.

Use 'on social media' rather than 'in social media' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Post them' matches plural 'photos' (subject-verb/number agreement, Grammar Problem Type 1/27). 'Share with everyone' is the correct preposition collocation (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'I love to document' is acceptable but 'I like to document it' sounds more natural here to avoid repeating 'love' and to refer back to 'photos' or 'what I saw'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to the noun, use 'on' for platforms, and use 'share with' for sharing to people.

× I actually love mountains and sea, but I believe I prefer mountain more than sea because I really love to go on top of the mountains and see what is below that point of view to see a large or wide view.

✓ I actually love the mountains and the sea, but I believe I prefer the mountains more than the sea because I really love to go to the top of mountains and see the wide view below.

Articles are needed with 'mountains' and 'sea' in this context (Grammar Problem Type 22/17). Pronoun/number and article usage were inconsistent (Grammar Problem Type 12/1). 'Prefer mountain more than sea' is incorrect; use 'prefer the mountains more than the sea' (Grammar Problem Type 27/22). 'Go on top of the mountains' is awkward; 'go to the top of mountains' or 'to the top of a mountain' is natural (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'See what is below that point of view to see a large or wide view' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to 'see the wide view below'. Suggestion: use definite articles for specific natural features, ensure plural agreement, and simplify phrasing for clarity.