Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体较自然，但存在语法错误、冗余和表达不够精确的问题。建议：1) 用一个明确的主题句直接回答（例如：Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car.）。2) 修正语法与时态（例如将“will look”改为“usually look”）。3) 精简冗余并用连接词组织细节（例如“for instance”或“also”）。4) 提供更具体的细节或短例子来支持观点，并注意单复数和词语搭配（例如“dogs chasing cats”而不是“dogs chasing them with cats”）。

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For instance, I often watch people walking along the street and children playing in parks. I find that observing everyday scenes helps me relax and gives me a little energy for the day.

제안: 回答表达不够准确且存在时态与语法错误，句子较长且有逻辑混乱。建议：1) 直接回答（例如“No, I don't.”），然后用一到两句解释理由。2) 修正时态和语法（例如“it makes me indulge in the atmosphere”→“it helps me enjoy the atmosphere”）。3) 使用连接词如“because”或“so”来理顺逻辑。4) 给出一个简短具体的例子（例如在山路上观察云层颜色变化）。

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of the view from the car. I prefer to watch the scenery because it helps me enjoy the moment, for example, I like observing how the light changes on the hills during sunset.

제안: 回答总体清晰且有个人背景支持，但存在语法和用词错误以及少量冗长。建议：1) 用简洁的主题句（例如“I prefer the sea.”）。2) 修正语法（“I was born...”, “I often spent time”）。3) 用连接词如“because”并补充具体细节（例如喜欢的活动或记忆）。4) 避免重复（“sea”一次即可），并注意单复数与冠词使用。

예시: I prefer the sea because I grew up in a small village by the coast. As a child I often spent afternoons walking along the shore and enjoying the fresh air and wide views of the ocean.

× Yes I do. I will look outside the windows to see different scenery.

✓ Yes, I do. I look out of the window to see different scenery.

句子中使用了将来时“will look”，但回答考官关于习惯性的行为（经常在旅行时看窗外），应使用一般现在时。建议把将来时改为一般现在时，主谓保持一致，并将“windows”改为单数“window”或保持复数取决于上下文（此处统一为单数）。

× For example I'll see people walking on the street or dogs chasing them with cats.

✓ For example, I'll see people walking on the street or dogs chasing cats.

原句“dogs chasing them with cats”在语义和主谓搭配上混乱。“them”指代不清且“with cats”结构错误。应改为“dogs chasing cats”表示“狗追赶猫”。如果想说狗追人，应明确为“dogs chasing people”。

× I think this can make me feel relaxed and input some energy into my life.

✓ I think this helps me feel relaxed and gives me some energy in my life.

“input some energy”是直接将中文“输入能量”直译，不符合英语表达习惯。应使用动词短语“give someone energy”或“provide energy”。同时用“helps me feel relaxed”比“make me feel relaxed”更自然。

× Oh no I don't, I will focus on the beautiful scenery and just made me indulge in the atmospheres because I think take photo will waste the time and cannot focus on it.

✓ Oh no, I don't. I focus on the beautiful scenery and just let myself indulge in the atmosphere because I think taking photos wastes time and prevents me from concentrating on it.

句子混用了现在时、将来时和过去式（“will focus”、“made me”）且结构混乱。描述习惯性行为应使用一般现在时（I focus...; I let myself...）。“take photo”需改为动名词短语“taking photos”，并注意动词时态与单复数（wastes time）。“atmospheres”应为不可数名词“atmosphere”。

× Oh, I prefer the sea because I was born in a little village near the sea and when I was a child I often spend time enjoying the refreshing air and see the beautiful scenery of the Seas.

✓ Oh, I prefer the sea because I was born in a small village near the sea, and when I was a child I often spent time enjoying the refreshing air and seeing the beautiful scenery of the sea.

句子中“often spend”应为过去时“often spent”与前文“when I was a child”保持时态一致。动名词“see”改为“seeing”。“Seas”不需要大写也不需要复数，应为“sea”。另外“little village”更常见的表达为“small village”。