Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and fix verb forms (e.g., “look” not “looks”).

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a gated compound where most houses have the same design and height, so the skyline is very uniform.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear main idea, use linking words and reduce repetition. Use correct prepositions and avoid informal filler phrases like “to brag” unless appropriate. Provide one specific example.

예시: Sometimes. If a building looks unusual or historic, I’ll photograph it to share on social media. For example, I took photos of a colorful mosque last year because its patterns were striking.

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Give a direct topic sentence and one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Mention a clear plan or detail to make it concrete.

예시: Yes. As an Egyptian, I’d love to visit the Pyramids of Giza because they are historically significant and architecturally impressive. I hope to see the interior chambers and learn more about ancient Egyptian culture on a guided tour.

제안: Start with a concise opinion, then provide one clear, specific reason using linking words (e.g., “for example” or “because”). Remove fillers and repetitions.

예시: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a very tall building because it can be inconvenient in emergencies. For example, if the elevator breaks, getting to or from a top-floor apartment would be difficult and time-consuming.

× I live in a compound where most of the buildings are looks very similar to each other and they all have the same height, so there are no tall buildings.

✓ I live in a compound where most of the buildings look very similar to each other and they are all the same height, so there are no tall buildings.

Original used 'are looks' which incorrectly combines the auxiliary 'are' with the base verb 'look' and a third-person plural subject requires 'look' (no -s) after plural noun; this is a subject-verb agreement and verb form error (map to ID 27 and ID 8/10). Also 'have the same height' is natural as 'are the same height' or 'have the same height'; changed to 'are all the same height' for fluency. Suggestion: use 'look' after plural noun and avoid doubling auxiliary verbs.

× It depends, if the building looks unique I would take a picture for it for to to brag to my friends or to post it on social media.

✓ It depends. If the building looks unique, I would take a picture of it to show off to my friends or post it on social media.

Original had 'take a picture for it' (incorrect preposition; should be 'of it') and redundant 'for to to brag'. This is an incorrect preposition and redundancy problem (IDs 11 and 26). Also 'to show off' is more natural than 'to brag'. Suggestion: use 'take a picture of' and keep a single purpose infinitive phrase like 'to show off' or 'to post'.

× And unfortunately I didn't, I don't, I didn't have the opportunity to visit the pyramids.

✓ And unfortunately I didn't have the opportunity to visit the pyramids.

Original contained inconsistent auxiliary verbs 'didn't, I don't, I didn't' causing tense and coherence problems (IDs 5 and 26). The intended meaning is past lack of opportunity, so a single past simple negative 'didn't have' is correct. Suggestion: choose one tense and avoid repeating auxiliaries.

× So I would probably go and visit, uh, the pyramids and anything with Egyptian authenticity.

✓ So I would probably go and visit the pyramids and anything with Egyptian authenticity.

Removed unnecessary hesitation 'uh' and comma. Article use 'the pyramids' is correct. This correction addresses sentence structure and fluency (ID 26 and 22). Suggestion: avoid filler words and keep sentence concise.

× No, I think it's not convenient at all to live in a tall building.

✓ No, I don't think it's convenient at all to live in a tall building.

Original 'I think it's not convenient' is understandable but less natural than 'I don't think it's convenient'. This is an issue of negative construction and natural adverb placement (IDs 13 and 20). Suggestion: use 'I don't think' for opinions and place 'at all' after 'convenient'.

× For instance, if you have, uh, if you're living in the highest floor.

✓ For instance, if you live on the highest floor.

Original used awkward phrasing 'have, uh, if you're living in the highest floor' and used wrong preposition 'in' with 'floor' (should be 'on'). This is incorrect preposition and tense/structure (IDs 11 and 26). Suggestion: use 'if you live on the highest floor' for a general conditional.

× So if anything happened, uh, for, uh, in the elevator, you would probably suffer a lot to reach your, to reach the highest floor.

✓ So if anything happened in the elevator, you would probably have a hard time reaching the highest floor.

Original repeated fillers and repeated phrase 'to reach your, to reach' and used awkward 'suffer a lot to reach'. This is sentence structure and collocation error (IDs 26 and 13). 'Have a hard time reaching' is a natural collocation. Suggestion: remove fillers and use natural verbs like 'have a hard time' plus gerund 'reaching'.