Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one short specific detail. Use correct articles and plural forms, and avoid repetition.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. For example, the tallest structure nearby is a two-storey community hall, so the skyline is mostly low and open.

제안: Give a clear main sentence and then one or two specific reasons. Avoid repeating words and be precise about what you photograph (rooms, details, people). Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of my house, especially the living room and kitchen, because these are where my family spends time together. For instance, I like capturing family meals or the decorations in the living room to remember those moments.

제안: Start with a direct answer naming the building or type of building, then give a specific reason and a brief detail about who you would go with. Avoid vague phrasing and correct tense and wording (e.g. "make memories").

예시: I would like to visit the tallest skyscraper in the world, such as the Burj Khalifa, because I want to see the city view from the observation deck. I would go with my family so we could enjoy the panorama together and take photos to make lasting memories.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with two clear, specific reasons. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and reduce hesitation. Use linking words like "because" and "also" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers excellent views over the city and lots of natural light. Also, tall residential buildings often have better security systems, such as CCTV and controlled access, which makes me feel safer.

× Well, I'm in my hometown, don't have any tall building because I live in the countryside.

✓ Well, I'm in my hometown and we don't have any tall buildings because I live in the countryside.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and conjunction between clauses ('I\'m in my hometown' and 'don\'t have any tall building'). This is a sentence structure error. Also 'tall building' should be plural to match 'any' and the general meaning. Suggestion: connect clauses with 'and' or restructure to 'I\'m in my hometown, and we don\'t have any tall buildings.'

× That's why we don't have any tall building.

✓ That's why we don't have any tall buildings.

With 'any' and a general negative statement, the count noun should be plural: 'tall buildings' rather than singular 'tall building.' Use plural for general reference to multiple items.

× Yes, of course I take a picture of my building because I really love every moment when I spend time in my building, like in the kitchen, in the living room with my family or my best, my best room.

✓ Yes, of course I take pictures of our house because I really love every moment when I spend time there, like in the kitchen or in the living room with my family or in my favorite room.

The original has awkward phrasing and repetition. 'Take a picture' should be plural 'take pictures' to match habitual action. 'My building' is unnatural for a home; 'house' or 'home' is better. 'My best, my best room' is incorrect; use 'my favorite room.' Also replace repeated locations with clearer prepositions: 'in the kitchen,' 'in the living room,' and 'in my favorite room.' This fixes sentence flow and word choice.

× The building I would like to visit is the tall building in the world, I mean very tall building in the world.

✓ The building I would like to visit is the tallest building in the world; I mean a very tall building in the world.

This sentence repeats ideas and lacks correct superlative form. Use 'the tallest building' (superlative) rather than 'the tall building.' Also split or join clauses correctly; a semicolon or rephrasing avoids the run-on. Keep 'a very tall building' if emphasizing height.

× I would like to go there with my family.

✓ I would like to go there with my family.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (Kept to follow instruction to reply each sentence.)

× We can enjoy every moment together and take a picture of what we have to do together and make me memory.

✓ We can enjoy every moment together, take pictures of what we do, and make memories.

The original is a run-on with unclear phrases: 'take a picture of what we have to do together' and 'make me memory' are ungrammatical. Use parallel verbs: 'enjoy,' 'take pictures,' and 'make memories.' Replace 'what we have to do together' with 'what we do' for natural expression, and 'make me memory' should be 'make memories.'

× Well, of course, I really like to live in the tall building because the tall building have many views and really good view.

✓ Well, of course, I would really like to live in a tall building because tall buildings have many views and really good views.

Errors: 'the tall building have' shows subject-verb disagreement and wrong article. Use 'a tall building' for a general desire and plural 'tall buildings have' to match 'many views.' Also 'really good view' should be plural 'really good views' or 'a really good view.' Using 'would really like' fits the hypothetical tone.

× And I think the tall building there have many more safety when, uh, we live in because they have many, uh, CCTV.

✓ And I think tall buildings there are much safer to live in because they have many CCTVs.

Original has subject-verb disagreement ('building... have'), awkward comparative and noun use ('many more safety'), and incorrect article with 'CCTV.' Use plural 'tall buildings' and 'are much safer' for correct comparison. 'Many CCTVs' or 'many CCTV cameras' is clearer than 'many CCTV.' Also phrase 'to live in' should follow 'safer.'