Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 流暢さと文法を改善しましょう。冗長なフィラー（uh, um）を減らし、主語と動詞の一致、単数・複数の形を正しく使うことが重要です。また、回答は直接的なトピック文（主な答え）を先に述べ、その後に具体的な補足を1〜2文で続けてください。例えば「I live in the city, so there are many tall buildings nearby.」のように簡潔に答える練習をしてください。

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. When I go out, I can see skyscrapers from many streets, especially near the business district.

제안: 内容をより具体的にし、語彙と表現を正しく使いましょう。不要なフィラーを減らし、頻度を表す語（usually, often, sometimes）や具体的な状況（on trips, at night）を使って明確に述べてください。また、'light up'の代わりに'illuminated'や'lighting'を使うと自然です。

예시: I don't usually take photos of buildings, but I sometimes photograph them when I'm traveling. I especially like taking pictures of illuminated buildings at night because their lighting looks spectacular.

제안: 発音の躓きや繰り返しを減らし、構造を整理しましょう。'one of the highest buildings' のような表現は正しいですが、余分な言い直しを避けて簡潔に述べてください。加えて、訪れたい理由（景観、展望台、建築）を1文で付け加えると説得力が増します。

예시: I'd like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it's one of the tallest buildings in the world. I'm interested in its architecture and I want to go up to the observation deck for the view.

제안: 語法と語順を改善し、理由をより具体的に述べましょう。'tower mansion'の説明は良いですが、'live in there'は不自然なので'live there'が正しいです。また、理由を2つ程度挙げ（眺め、便利さ、設備など）、linking word（for example, because）でつなぐ練習をしてください。

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building someday. In Japan, high-rise apartments called 'tower mansions' are considered prestigious, and they often offer great views and convenient facilities, which appeals to me.

× Yes, uh, there is uh, uh, many tall buildings near my home because I live in, in a City side.

✓ Yes, uh, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live on the city side.

The verb 'there is' does not agree with the plural noun 'many tall buildings'; use 'there are'. Also 'in a City side' is incorrect preposition and capitalization; use 'on the city side'. Improve by matching verb number to noun and using correct preposition for location.

× So, uh, when I go to everywhere I can see, uh, tall buildings.

✓ So, uh, wherever I go I can see tall buildings.

The phrase 'go to everywhere' is ungrammatical; use 'wherever I go' for correct adverbial clause. Remove extra commas and filler words for clarity.

× Yes, but it depends on the situation.

✓ Yes, it depends on the situation.

This sentence is acceptable but 'but' is redundant; removing it makes the sentence more natural. No article change needed; this is a style suggestion rather than a strict grammar error.

× Uh, most time I don't uh, take photos of buildings.

✓ Most of the time I don't take photos of buildings.

Use 'most of the time' rather than 'most time' for correct English. Keep present simple for habitual action. Remove filler 'uh'.

× However, uh, when I go on a trip or I see the sightseeing at night, I take photos about light up.

✓ However, when I go on a trip or see the sights at night, I take photos of the lighting.

'See the sightseeing' is incorrect; use 'see the sights'. 'Take photos about light up' is ungrammatical; use 'take photos of the lighting' or 'take photos of the lights'. Preposition 'of' is correct with 'photos'.

× Yes, I would like to visit Burj Khalifa, which is located in Dubai and uh, which is a one of the most sorry, one of the highest buildings in the world.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa, which is located in Dubai and is one of the highest buildings in the world.

Use the definite article 'the' with famous buildings. Remove duplicate 'which' and the filler 'sorry'. 'A one of the' is incorrect; say 'one of the highest'. Keep present simple for general fact.

× So I want to uh visit in the future.

✓ So I want to visit it in the future.

Add object 'it' to clarify what you want to visit. Keep future intention expressed with 'want to' plus verb; add prepositional phrase 'in the future' correctly.

× In Japan there is a lot of tall building and which is called Tower Mansion and to a live tower mansion is kind of a status.

✓ In Japan there are a lot of tall buildings called tower mansions, and living in a tower mansion is seen as a kind of status.

Plural agreement: 'there are' for 'a lot of tall buildings' and plural noun 'buildings'. Remove 'which' and restructure: 'called tower mansions'. 'To a live' is incorrect; use 'living in'. Clarify 'is seen as a kind of status' for natural English.

× So if I'm rich, I really want to live in there.

✓ So if I'm rich, I really want to live there.

Do not use 'in' with 'there' when 'live' already takes 'there' as an adverbial location. Use 'live there'. Maintain conditional present for hypothetical future.