Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 質問に直接答えていない点と文法ミス（主語・動詞の一致や時制）を修正してください。短く明確な主題文を述べ、その後で必要ならば一つか二つの具体例をつけると良いです。例えば「Yes/No」の返答を明確にし、リンク語（because, so, however）を使って理由をつなぎます。発音で重要な単語（center, many, buildings）に注意し、文は3〜4文に収めてください。

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city centre. For example, there are several office towers and apartment blocks within a ten-minute walk. They make the area feel busy and modern.

제안: 回答の構造はほぼ良いですが、不要な言い直し（ums, uh）と誤った語（take off）を避けてください。より具体的な理由を一つ追加し、リンク語を使って流れを整えましょう。発音と流暢さを意識して一息で話せるよう練習すると良いです。

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer photographing nature. For instance, I often take pictures of parks and rivers since I enjoy capturing colours and natural light.

제안: 曖昧で文が途中で終わっているため、明確な一文の主題文とその後に具体的な理由や細部（場所、特徴、訪れたい理由）を1〜2文で付け加えてください。言い直しを減らし、建物名の発音を明確にし、文法（This is a skyscraper in Shibuya）を正しく使ってください。

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit the Cerulean Tower in Shibuya, which is a famous skyscraper near my home. I want to see the city view from its observation deck and try the restaurant on the top floor.

제안: 理由は述べているものの、言い直しと繰り返し（now I live, get get）を減らし、理由を論理的に整理してください。肯定・否定をはっきりさせ、利点と欠点を一つずつ挙げると説得力が増します。リンク語（because, so, however）を使って構成を整え、語彙（convenient, crowded, noisy）を正確に使いましょう。

예시: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I already do and I prefer being closer to street level. Living near the ground floor feels more convenient and quieter for me.

× Is there many tall buildings near my house because I live in the Center City?

✓ Are there many tall buildings near my house because I live in the center of the city?

'Is there' is used for singular existence; with plural 'many tall buildings' use 'Are there'. Also 'the Center City' is unnatural; use 'the center of the city' or 'downtown'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with existential 'there' constructions.

× No, I don't usually take off, uh, take photos of buildings because I prefer photographing nature.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer photographing nature.

Remove the incorrect phrasal verb 'take off' which makes the sentence ungrammatical. The main verb 'take' with object 'photos' is correct. Also keep 'prefer photographing nature' or 'prefer to photograph nature' for clarity.

× Yes, uh, I'd like to go to the Chivas career. This is kind of skyscraper it uh, in Shibuya it it's close to my house, but I have.

✓ Yes, I'd like to go to the Chivas Tower. It is a kind of skyscraper in Shibuya and it's close to my house, but I haven't been there yet.

Multiple issues: 'Chivas career' is likely a miswording; use 'Chivas Tower' or correct building name. Broken clauses need reorganization: 'This is kind of skyscraper' should be 'It is a kind of skyscraper'. Remove filler 'it uh' and combine clauses with conjunctions. The ending 'but I have.' is incomplete; likely intended 'but I haven't been there yet.' Ensure past participle 'been' for experience.

× No I don't because I now I live in a tall building then I feel that it's convenient to get get on the street level.

✓ No, I don't because I now live in a tall building, so I feel that it's convenient to get to street level.

Fix repetition and connector: use 'so' rather than 'then' for result. Use 'get to street level' not 'get on the street level'. Remove duplicated 'get'. Add commas for clarity and correct adverb placement of 'now'.