Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases. Correct tense and prepositions (e.g., "in the city centre", "surrounding my area" → "around my area").

예시: Yes. I live in the city centre, so there are many tall buildings around my area. For example, there are several apartment towers and office blocks, and I often visit that part of town to relax or meet friends.

제안: Give a direct answer first (yes/no), then briefly explain why and give one specific example. Replace awkward phrases ("I am love", "some something") with correct forms and use linking words like "because" or "for example".

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos, especially of buildings around my neighbourhood, because I find beautiful or luxury facades very picturesque. For example, I often photograph a historic hotel nearby when the light is good.

제안: Answer directly and give clear, specific details. Use correct sentence structure and linking words to connect facts and reasons. Correct grammar ("It includes 81 floors", "It is very tall and luxurious") and avoid repeating words like "really" too often.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it has 81 floors and is the tallest building in Vietnam. Also, there is a luxury restaurant at the top, so I would love to go there for the view and dinner.

제안: Provide a clear opinion followed by two brief reasons using linking words ("because", "so"). Fix grammar and redundancy (remove duplicate words like "is is", "a an"). Be specific about what makes tall buildings peaceful (e.g., higher floors, less street noise).

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because apartments on higher floors are usually quieter and offer better views. For instance, living on the tenth floor or above would reduce street noise and give me more privacy.

× Yes, of course, because I live in the center of the city so surrounded my area, it has a lot of buildings, especially tall buildings and it's like the apartment or like the whole or the, uh, city center.

✓ Yes, of course. I live in the center of the city, so my area is surrounded by many buildings, especially tall ones, and it feels like an apartment district or the whole city center.

The student used incorrect prepositions and word order: 'surrounded my area' should be 'my area is surrounded by' (passive with preposition by). Also 'it has a lot of buildings' is awkward for location description; 'surrounded by many buildings' is clearer. Use 'tall ones' to avoid repetition. Improve sentence clarity by breaking into shorter clauses.

× And I often go to there for unwind or just visit my friend.

✓ I often go there to unwind or just visit my friend.

Use 'go there' not 'go to there' (remove extra preposition). Use infinitive 'to unwind' instead of bare verb and keep parallel structure 'to unwind or to visit' (second 'to' optional).

× A little bit because I am love taking photos especially I like the photos that include some something that surrounded my area.

✓ A little, because I love taking photos, especially ones that include things surrounding my area.

'A little bit' as a standalone answer is acceptable but collocation with emotion is wrong: 'I am love' should be 'I love' (verb form error — see next). 'Some something' is redundant; use 'things' or 'something'. 'Surrounded my area' should be 'surrounding my area' (present participle).

× So I take some photos with the buildings, especially the beautiful buildings or luxury buildings because I think it's really picturesque.

✓ So I take some photos of buildings, especially beautiful or luxurious ones, because I think they are really picturesque.

Use 'take photos of' not 'with the buildings'. 'Luxury buildings' should be 'luxurious ones' (adjective form and pronoun substitution). 'It's really picturesque' is incorrect because 'it' refers to photos or buildings plural; use 'they are' for plural reference.

× Yes, of course. Is that the landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City in my country Vietnam and it include 81 floors that is make the most feature at that buildings.

✓ Yes, of course. It is Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam, and it has 81 floors, which is the building's most notable feature.

Use 'It is' to identify the building, not 'Is that'. 'Include' should be 'has' for possession. 'That is make the most feature at that buildings' is ungrammatical; use a relative clause 'which is the building's most notable feature'. Correct article use 'the building' and singular/plural consistency.

× It's really tall and really luxury in the top of that building it has a luxury restaurant that I really want to visit.

✓ It's really tall and very luxurious. At the top of the building, there is a luxury restaurant that I would really like to visit.

Use adjective 'luxurious' not noun 'luxury' to describe the building. Use 'very' as adverb to modify adjective. 'In the top' should be 'at the top'. Use 'there is' for existence and 'would really like to' for polite desire. Sentence was a run-on; split into two.

× I honestly I really like to live in the tall buildings and my dream is is I can have a an apartment to live because I am really like to live in a peaceful place.

✓ Honestly, I would really like to live in a tall building, and my dream is to have an apartment because I really like living in a peaceful place.

Remove duplicate 'I' and repeated 'is'. Use conditional 'would like' for desire. Use singular 'a tall building' or 'in tall buildings' consistently. 'Can have a an apartment to live' should be 'to have an apartment'. Use gerund 'living' after 'like' when describing preference.

× So I think in the tall building it doesn't have a lot of noise of vehicles or neighborhood.

✓ So I think that in a tall building there isn't much noise from vehicles or neighbors.

'It doesn't have' is wrong for location; use 'there isn't' or 'there isn't much'. Use 'noise from vehicles' not 'noise of vehicles'. 'Neighborhood' used as noisy agent is awkward; 'neighbors' or 'the neighborhood' works, but 'neighbors' fits here. Use quantifier 'much' for uncountable 'noise'.