Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details. Use correct articles and plural forms, and keep it within 2–3 sentences. For example, say you live in a small town and describe what kinds of houses are common.

예시: Not really. I live in a small town far from the city centre, so most houses are low-rise family homes rather than tall buildings. Because the area is mostly residential, you rarely see high-rises nearby.

제안: Be concise and correct word choice. Give one clear reason and one specific example of what you do photograph. Avoid repetition and incorrect forms (use 'architecture' not 'architectures', 'impressed' → 'not impressed' or 'not interested').

예시: No, I don't usually photograph buildings because I'm not very interested in architecture. Instead, I prefer landscapes, for example beaches and mountains, which I find more visually appealing.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar. If you mention a building, give a specific reason and one detail about your experience. Use linking words (for example, 'however' or 'because') and correct adjective forms ('impressed' → 'impressed' or 'not impressed')

예시: Not particularly, but if I had to choose, it would be Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City. I visited it once and, although I wasn't especially impressed by the architecture, I would like to return to enjoy the panoramic views from the observation deck.

제안: Use formal but natural language and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons and a concern. Replace informal words ('wanna') and fix plural/article errors. Clarify 'FAR' (probably 'fire').

예시: Yes, I'd like to try living in a high-rise apartment because I grew up in a small town and I'm curious about that lifestyle. However, I would be worried about safety, for example how easy it would be to evacuate in the event of a fire.

× Not really I afraid.

✓ Not really, I'm afraid.

The student omitted the auxiliary verb and used wrong word order. 'I afraid' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'I'm afraid' (contraction of 'I am afraid'). Use the verb 'to be' with the pronoun: 'I am' or 'I'm'. Also add a comma after 'Not really' for clarity.

× I live in a small town far from the centre of the city so along with Nomos house for typical families I don't think there is any other types.

✓ I live in a small town far from the city centre, so apart from the typical family houses in the neighborhood, I don't think there are any other types.

The student mixed singular/plural: 'any other types' must agree with plural 'types' and the verb 'are'. Also word order and word choice were incorrect: 'along with Nomos house for typical families' is unclear. I replaced it with 'apart from the typical family houses in the neighborhood'. Use 'there are' for plural existence and ensure modifiers are in the correct order.

× No, I do not. The main reason is that I'm not really interested in architectures, so I really impressed by buildings, so I have never taken photos of them.

✓ No, I don't. The main reason is that I'm not really interested in architecture, and I'm not impressed by buildings, so I have never taken photos of them.

'Architectures' is incorrect; the uncountable noun 'architecture' should be used. 'I really impressed by buildings' lacks the verb 'be' and uses the wrong adjective form; it should be 'I'm not impressed'. Also use conjunctions to connect ideas smoothly: 'and' rather than repeating 'so' twice.

× I usually prefer photographing landscapes instead, such as beaches or.

✓ I usually prefer photographing landscapes instead, such as beaches.

The sentence ends with a dangling 'or' that leaves the comparison incomplete. Remove the trailing 'or' or complete the list. Also 'prefer photographing landscapes' is fine; keep the sentence concise: 'such as beaches'.

× Not really, but if I had to choose one it would be landmark 80 ones in Ho Chi Minh City.

✓ Not really, but if I had to choose one it would be Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City.

The student used 'landmark 80 ones' which is ungrammatical and likely the wrong number. Use the correct name and singular form for a single building: 'Landmark 81'. Also capitalize proper nouns and use 'it would be' to refer to one building.

× Actually I have visited it before and although I wasn't very impressive by its architectures, I would love to go back and see the city from the observation deck.

✓ Actually, I have visited it before and although I wasn't very impressed by its architecture, I would love to go back and see the city from the observation deck.

Use 'impressed' (past participle used as adjective) with the auxiliary 'was' to form 'wasn't impressed'. 'Impressive' is wrong here because the speaker describes their reaction. Also 'architectures' should be 'architecture' (uncountable). Add commas for clarity.

× Yeah I really wanna try living in a high rise apartment because I grew up in a small towns and I really curious about is lifestyle.

✓ Yeah, I really want to try living in a high-rise apartment because I grew up in a small town and I'm really curious about its lifestyle.

Contractions/slang 'wanna' should be formalized to 'want to'. 'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as an adjective. 'A small towns' mixes singular and plural; use 'a small town'. 'I really curious' lacks the verb 'to be' — use 'I'm really curious'. 'Is lifestyle' is wrong pronoun; use 'its lifestyle' to refer to the apartment or building.

× However, I'm also really concerned about safety, for example how easy it would be to evacuate during a FAR.

✓ However, I'm also really concerned about safety, for example how easy it would be to evacuate during a fire.

'During a FAR' is unclear and likely a typo. Replace with 'during a fire' for a natural example. Also maintain article usage: 'concerned about safety' is correct. If an acronym is intended, spell it out and ensure it's appropriate.