Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more clearly and correct grammatical errors. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences natural and within five sentences.

예시: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, two apartment towers nearby are about 15 to 20 stories high, which makes the neighbourhood feel modern. As a result, there are many shops and convenient facilities within walking distance.

제안: Fix pronunciation and word choice errors and make the response more concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example and a linking phrase to explain why you take photos.

예시: Not usually, but I do sometimes take photos of striking buildings, especially when I travel. For instance, I photographed an ornate colonial mansion last year because I wanted to remember the architectural details and learn about its history.

제안: Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use one clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words. Check word choice errors (e.g., 'most highest', 'hate') and keep answers within five sentences.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is famously tall and architecturally impressive. In particular, I want to go up to the observation deck to see panoramic views of the city and the desert, which I think would be unforgettable.

제안: Make sentences grammatical and concise. Start with a direct answer, then give two specific reasons connected by linking words. Replace incorrect words ('a good facilities', 'a high up', 'hate') and avoid repeating the same reason.

예시: Yes, I would consider living in a tall building, but only if it had good facilities and a pleasant view. For example, higher floors tend to be quieter and offer better cityscapes, but I would avoid extremely high floors because I am uncomfortable with heights.

× Most of them are more than apartment blocks and some of them are around 15 to 20 stories high.

✓ Most of them are apartment blocks, and some are around 15 to 20 stories high.

The original sentence used 'more than apartment blocks' which is incorrect for expressing that many are apartment buildings. Use 'are apartment blocks' for a simple identification. Also remove redundant 'of them' after 'some' for conciseness.

× I actually like living near them because they're the area feels more developed and there are usually plenty of shops and other facilities nearby.

✓ I actually like living near them because the area feels more developed and there are usually plenty of shops and other facilities nearby.

The phrase 'they're the area' is incorrect: 'they're' (they are) does not fit. The correct phrase is 'the area feels' using the definite article 'the' before 'area'. Remove 'they're' to fix sentence structure.

× Yes, I'm not really into her architecture, but if I'm seeing an unusual or beautiful building I might take a photo of it, especially when I'm traveling.

✓ Yes, I'm not really into architecture, but if I see an unusual or beautiful building I might take a photo of it, especially when I'm traveling.

'Her architecture' is incorrect pronoun use; architecture is uncountable and does not take a possessive pronoun here. Use 'into architecture'. Also 'if I'm seeing' is unnatural for conditional general habit; use simple present 'if I see'.

× It's one of the most impressive buildings in the world and one of the most highest building in the world.

✓ It's one of the most impressive buildings in the world and one of the highest buildings in the world.

'Most highest' is redundant and ungrammatical: 'highest' already expresses the superlative. Also keep plural 'buildings' after 'one of the'.

× And I would like to see is the city from the observation deck.

✓ And I would like to see the city from the observation deck.

The original sentence has an extra 'is' creating ungrammatical word order. Remove 'is' to form the correct infinitive phrase 'would like to see the city'.

× I think the view from such a hate would be absolutely incredible.

✓ I think the view from such a height would be absolutely incredible.

The word 'hate' is a typo or incorrect word choice for 'height'. Use 'height' when referring to vertical distance; 'hate' is unrelated.

× I think I would, but only if the building had a good facilities and a nice view.

✓ I think I would, but only if the building had good facilities and a nice view.

'A good facilities' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'facilities'. Remove 'a' to match the plural noun 'facilities' or change to 'a good facility' if singular. Here plural 'good facilities' fits context.

× I like the idea of living a high up because it would probably be quieter and I could enjoy a greater view of the city.

✓ I like the idea of living high up because it would probably be quieter and I could enjoy a better view of the city.

Use 'living high up' without the article 'a'. Also 'greater view' is awkward; 'better view' is the natural collocation.

× However, I wouldn't want to live on an extremely high floor because I might feel a bit uncomfortable there because I'm afraid of the hate.

✓ However, I wouldn't want to live on an extremely high floor because I might feel a bit uncomfortable there because I'm afraid of the height.

Again 'hate' is incorrect; 'height' is the correct noun for fear of high places. The rest of the sentence is acceptable though repetitive use of 'because' could be streamlined.