Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct articles and plurals, and use one linking word to add contrast. Provide a specific example of nearby taller buildings if relevant.

예시: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home because I live in a neighborhood of single-storey cottages. However, a short walk from my area there are several apartment blocks of around ten storeys, mainly along the main road.

제안: Answer directly and correct informal language. Replace contractions and slang, reduce repetition, and use linking words to explain frequency and reason. Mention a specific recent example to make it more concrete.

예시: Not usually, because most houses in my hometown look very similar. However, if I see an unusual or historic building, I take a photo and post it to my close friends; for example, I recently photographed a colourful mural on a renovated shopfront.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons without fillers. Use linking words (because, although, so) and provide concrete details about what you want to see or do there to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower because it is an iconic historic monument and offers great views of Paris. For instance, I want to go to the observation deck to see the city skyline and learn about its history at the museum inside.

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct and structured: state your preference, then give specific reasons and use linking words (because, so). Mention particular advantages of living high up to add detail.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall apartment building because I enjoy the views and the amenities. For example, living on the top floor with a gym and cafes downstairs would be convenient and peaceful, and I would appreciate the better natural light and reduced street noise.

× No, there's not much more tall buildings near my home because I live in neighborhood which is where people have their own cottages like with only one floor.

✓ No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home because I live in a neighborhood where people have their own cottages with only one floor.

The sentence misuses 'there's' (there is) with the plural 'tall buildings' and uses 'not much more' incorrectly. Use 'there aren't' (there are not) for plural nouns (There be issue). Also replace 'much' with 'many' for countable plural nouns and add the article 'a' before 'neighborhood'. Remove redundant 'which is' and correct word order for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'there are' for plural and 'many' with countable nouns; include articles where needed.

× That's why there is no tall buildings around us.

✓ That's why there are no tall buildings around us.

Using 'there is' with the plural noun 'tall buildings' is incorrect (There be issue). Use 'there are' for plural subjects. Suggestion: Match 'there is/there are' to singular/plural nouns.

× However umm, you could see many apartments with like 10 floors.

✓ However, you can see many apartment buildings with around 10 floors.

Original sentence uses informal 'could' and 'like' as filler; while not strictly wrong grammatically, clarity improves by using 'can' for general ability and 'apartment buildings' for correct noun. The listed issue type that applies is Verb + -ing form because the phrase 'with like 10 floors' is awkward; correcting to 'with around 10 floors' removes the issue. Suggestion: Use 'can' for general statements and avoid filler words like 'like'.

× I think no 'cause in my hometown we usually have general houses that are like the same with each other, but when I see something outstanding I usually take a photo of it and upload it to my stories in my close friends.

✓ I usually don't take photos because in my hometown we have similar houses, but when I see something outstanding I take a photo and upload it to my close friends' stories.

'I think no' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'I usually don't' for habitual negation (Modal verb usage). Also 'general houses that are like the same with each other' is awkward—use 'similar houses'. 'Upload it to my stories in my close friends' should be 'upload it to my close friends' stories' to show possession. Suggestion: Use standard negative forms for habits ('usually don't') and place possessive correctly.

× I think Eiffel Tower it's really interesting to visit because it's really umm, it's really old, but uh, anyway, umm, today is still very popular and because of its location, it is in City of Love, so that's why I would really love to visit it.

✓ I think the Eiffel Tower is really interesting to visit because it's very old, but it is still very popular today and, because it is in the City of Love, I would really love to visit it.

Multiple issues: missing article 'the' before 'Eiffel Tower' (There be / Article errors). Use 'the Eiffel Tower' (Article errors/There be). Also remove redundant 'it's really' repetitions and reorder clauses for clarity. 'City of Love' should include 'the'. Suggestion: Use definite article 'the' with named monuments and reduce redundancy for clearer speech.

× In my dream house is living in an apartment which has many floors and I would be in the tallest floor with gym and other cafes in this building so that's why I would really like to live there.

✓ In my dream, I would live in an apartment building with many floors, and I would live on the top floor where there is a gym and some cafes, so I would really like to live there.

Original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect prepositions/phrasing (Sentence structure errors). 'In my dream house is living in an apartment' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'In my dream, I would live...'. Use 'top floor' rather than 'tallest floor', and 'where there is a gym' to introduce facilities. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb order and common collocations ('top floor', 'apartment building', 'there is').