Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct prepositions and articles, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add one specific detail (e.g., types of buildings or distance) using a linking word to make it coherent.

예시: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in Yangon, which is an urban city. For example, there are several modern apartment towers and office blocks within a five-minute walk from my house.

제안: Remove repetition and improve noun forms and articles. Give a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail that explains why or when you take photos, using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially historic ones. I do this because they are rare and have interesting details, so I usually photograph them when I visit old towns or landmarks.

제안: Be specific and avoid overused adjectives and repetition. Use a concise topic sentence naming the building, then give 1–2 clear reasons (history, design, view) linked with words like 'because' or 'because of'.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Petronas Twin Towers in Kuala Lumpur because they are famous for their unique design and skybridge. Also, I want to see the view from the observation deck and take photos of the cityscape.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain with one or two specific reasons. Remove fillers and repetitions, use correct pronouns and articles, and connect ideas with words like 'however' or 'because'.

예시: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. Although it would offer great views from the top, I prefer living in a house because it feels more private and has more outdoor space.

× Yes, yes, uh, there are many tall buildings surrounded my house.

✓ Yes, yes, uh, there are many tall buildings surrounding my house.

Grammar problem type ID:8 Verb + -ing form. The verb 'surround' should be in its present participle form 'surrounding' to show that the buildings are around the house. Use 'surrounding' after the noun phrase to form a participle phrase modifying 'tall buildings'.

× Umm, I live in Yangon. It's, it's uh, urban city.

✓ Umm, I live in Yangon. It's an urban city.

Grammar problem type ID:22 Article errors. The noun phrase 'urban city' requires the indefinite article 'an' because 'urban' begins with a vowel sound. Include 'an' to make the noun phrase grammatical.

× So most of the, most of the structures are all tall buildings.

✓ So most of the structures are tall buildings.

Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure errors / 20 Incorrect adverb placement. The repetition 'most of the, most of the' is redundant and 'are all' is unnecessary. Remove redundancy and the word 'all' for a clearer, grammatical sentence: 'most of the structures are tall buildings.'

× Yes I I take photos of building especially those pretty buildings which is rare like like those historic building.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings, especially pretty ones that are rare, like those historic buildings.

Grammar problem type ID:1 Singular and plural issue; ID:12 Incorrect use of pronouns; ID:13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. Multiple issues: 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'photos of'; 'those pretty buildings which is rare' has subject-verb disagreement and unnatural wording—use 'that are rare' and convert 'pretty buildings' to 'pretty ones' to avoid repetition; 'historic building' should be plural 'historic buildings' to match 'those'. The correction fixes number agreement and clarifies the relative clause.

× I would take it.

✓ I would take them.

Grammar problem type ID:1 Singular and plural issue / ID:12 Incorrect use of pronouns. 'Photos' is plural, so the pronoun referring to them must be plural ('them'), not singular 'it'.

× Yes I I take photos of building especially those pretty buildings which is rare like like those historic building. I would take it.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings, especially pretty ones that are rare, like those historic buildings. I would take them.

Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure errors combined with ID:1 Singular and plural issue. This groups corrections to produce a coherent, grammatical response: plural nouns agree with plural pronouns and relative clauses use correct verb agreement.

× Oh yes, the twin tower in Malaysia, Kuala Lumpur, it's, it's, it's pretty famous.

✓ Oh yes, the Twin Towers in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia, are pretty famous.

Grammar problem type ID:1 Singular and plural issue; ID:27 Subject-verb agreement errors. The landmark commonly referred to is the Twin Towers (plural), so use plural noun 'Twin Towers' and plural verb 'are'. Also place the city and country in natural order.

× It's one of the tourist attraction you must go in Kuala Lumpur.

✓ It's one of the tourist attractions you must visit in Kuala Lumpur.

Grammar problem type ID:1 Singular and plural issue; ID:11 Incorrect use of prepositions. 'Attraction' should be plural 'attractions' after 'one of the'; use the verb 'visit' instead of 'go' for a building, and include the preposition 'in' before the city as 'visit in Kuala Lumpur' or better 'to visit in Kuala Lumpur'. The corrected version uses 'visit in' which is acceptable, but 'to visit in' can also be used depending on context.

× And it's very enormous and huge and very unique.

✓ And it's very enormous, huge, and unique.

Grammar problem type ID:18 Incorrect order of adjectives; ID:13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. 'Enormous' and 'huge' are near synonyms—use one or combine without repetition. 'Very unique' is considered incorrect by some prescriptive rules because 'unique' is absolute; better to use just 'unique' or 'very distinctive'. The correction removes redundancy and improves adjective coordination.

× To be honest, no, but living on a tall building is quite nice.

✓ To be honest, no, but living in a tall building is quite nice.

Grammar problem type ID:11 Incorrect use of prepositions. Use 'in' for living inside a building. 'On' would refer to a surface (on the roof), so 'in a tall building' is correct.

× Your you can have a great view from top but I prefer I prefer living in a in a house, not tall buildings. I'm.

✓ You can have a great view from the top, but I prefer living in a house, not in a tall building.

Grammar problem type ID:20 Incorrect adverb placement; ID:11 Incorrect use of prepositions; ID:26 Sentence structure errors. Remove the duplicated 'your you' and extra 'I prefer'. Use 'from the top' with definite article 'the'. Keep consistent prepositions: 'living in a house' and 'not in a tall building'. Also remove the trailing fragment 'I'm.' which is incomplete (ID:23 Sentence without a verb if left alone). The corrected sentence is complete and grammatical.