Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and provides personal detail, but it is slightly repetitive and a bit long. Aim to start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy (e.g., "I live in the center of the city" and "you can imagine how many tall buildings are there" convey the same idea), and keep the response within 3–4 concise sentences. Use a linking word to add the favourite-building detail smoothly.

예시: Yes — I live in the city center, so there are many tall buildings nearby. One I like most is the A7 Story Building because it has an attractive design and a cosy café on the first floor, which I often visit to relax.

제안: Good content with a clear reason and a specific example. Reduce fillers (e.g., "uh") and tighten sentences to avoid repetition ("really beautiful to look at" repeats earlier ideas). Use a linking word (e.g., "for example" or "besides") to connect ideas, and make the example more concise and descriptive.

예시: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially when I travel, because photos help me remember places. For example, in Sydney I was impressed by the Opera House’s unique sails, so I took many pictures to capture its distinctive architecture.

제안: The answer gives good background but has some grammatical errors and slight repetition ("planning to visit it this time when I am planning to go"). Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and wording (e.g., "learned about it"), and avoid repeating the same idea. Add a brief reason why you want to visit and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I would love to visit the Taj Mahal in India. I learned about it at school and have admired its beauty ever since, so I plan to see it when I next travel to my home country.

제안: Your answer explains personal reasons but is repetitive (multiple uses of "because") and slightly long. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting reasons linked with connectors (e.g., "because", "however"). Correct minor phrasing ("for my parents, climbing stairs is difficult") and keep sentences concise.

예시: Not really — I prefer living in a house because it is more convenient for my elderly parents, as climbing stairs can be difficult for them. However, I have lived in a tall dormitory building while I was a student.

× Very much so. There are numerous towering buildings where I live because I live in the center of the city and you can imagine how many tall buildings are there.

✓ Very much so. There are numerous towering buildings where I live because I live in the center of the city, and you can imagine how many tall buildings there are.

This sentence contained an incorrect word order in the clause 'how many tall buildings are there.' In statements and embedded clauses, the subject should come before the verb (there are), not the question order (are there). Move 'are' after the subject 'tall buildings' to form a correct statement.' Suggestion: Use statement word order for embedded clauses: 'how many tall buildings there are.'

× My favorite one is definitely A7 Story building which is really beautiful to look at and they have an incredibly cosy cafe on the 1st floor which is one of my favorite places.

✓ My favorite one is definitely the A7 Story building, which is really beautiful to look at, and it has an incredibly cosy cafe on the 1st floor, which is one of my favorite places.

Several issues: the building name needs the definite article 'the' before a specific building name; 'building' as a singular noun should take a singular pronoun 'it' rather than 'they'; commas are needed before nonrestrictive 'which' clauses. Suggestions: use 'the A7 Story building' and replace 'they have' with 'it has.' Add commas before 'which' clauses for clarity.' (Primary grammar types: article usage and pronoun agreement.)

× Absolutely, especially when I am travelling, uh, because that's the main way how we make memories.

✓ Absolutely, especially when I am travelling, because that's the main way we make memories.

The phrase 'the main way how we make memories' is unidiomatic: English prefers 'the way we make memories' or 'how we make memories,' but not both. Remove 'how' to make it grammatical and natural. Also remove filler 'uh' in a formal correction.' Suggestion: Use 'the main way we make memories' or 'the main way to make memories.'

× Other than that, I also love buildings that are architecturally defined.

✓ Other than that, I also love architecturally distinctive buildings.

The phrase 'architecturally defined' is awkward and nonstandard. Use an adjective like 'architecturally distinctive' or 'architecturally notable' placed before the noun for natural English. Suggestion: 'architecturally distinctive buildings.'

× For instance, last time when I visited Sydney, I was really impressed by the Opera House.

✓ For instance, when I last visited Sydney, I was really impressed by the Opera House.

Word order is slightly awkward; 'last time when I visited Sydney' is redundant and nonidiomatic. Use 'when I last visited Sydney' to place the time expression correctly. Tense (past) is appropriate; just adjust word order.'

× So I had to take a lot of pictures and it was really beautiful to look at it.

✓ So I had to take a lot of pictures, and it was really beautiful to look at.

The clause ends with a redundant pronoun 'it.' The phrase 'beautiful to look at' already refers to the Opera House, so adding 'it' at the end is unnecessary and ungrammatical. Remove the final 'it.' Suggestion: 'it was really beautiful to look at.'

× I would say Taj Mahal which is located in India, built by the Mughal king Shah Jahan.

✓ I would say the Taj Mahal, which is located in India and was built by the Mughal emperor Shah Jahan.

Needs the definite article 'the' before Taj Mahal, and the nonrestrictive clause should be joined with 'and' for two facts. Also 'built by' refers to a past passive action and sounds better as 'was built by.' 'King' is less common; 'emperor' is more accurate. Suggestion: 'the Taj Mahal, which is located in India and was built by the Mughal emperor Shah Jahan.'

× I have studied about in in history while I was a child.

✓ I studied it in history when I was a child.

The phrase 'studied about in in history' has redundant and incorrect prepositions and word order. Use 'studied it in history' or 'learned about it in history class.' Also 'while I was a child' is better rendered as 'when I was a child.' Suggestion: 'I learned about it in history when I was a child.'

× Ever since then, I always wanted to visit Taj Mahal but I never got a chance.

✓ Ever since then, I have always wanted to visit the Taj Mahal, but I never got a chance.

Mixing 'ever since then' (which connects past to present) with simple past 'I always wanted' is inconsistent. Use present perfect 'have always wanted' to show continued desire. Also add 'the' before 'Taj Mahal.' Suggestion: 'I have always wanted to visit the Taj Mahal.'

× However, I'm planning to visit it this time when I am planning to go to India.

✓ However, I'm planning to visit it when I go to India this time.

Redundant repetition 'planning' and awkward word order. Combine into a single clear future plan: 'I'm planning to visit it when I go to India this time.' Suggestion: avoid repeating verbs and place time expressions at the end for clarity.'

× That's where I'm from.

✓ That's where I'm from.

This sentence is grammatical and needs no change. Included for completeness.'

× To be honest, I have never thought about it because I usually prefer houses because it is more convenient, especially for my parents because climbing stairs is something really hard for them because of their old age.

✓ To be honest, I have never thought about it because I usually prefer houses, which are more convenient, especially for my parents, because climbing stairs is really hard for them due to their age.

Multiple issues: repetition of 'because' creates run-on and redundancy; 'houses' plural is fine but needs correct referencing; 'something really hard' is awkward—use 'really hard' or 'difficult.' 'Because of their old age' is wordy; 'due to their age' is more natural and less pejorative. Suggestion: simplify clauses, reduce repeated 'because.'

× However, as a student I used to live in a dorm which was A7 story building.

✓ However, as a student I used to live in a dorm which was an A7-story building.

Needs the indefinite article 'an' before a noun phrase beginning with a vowel sound 'A7,' and 'A7 story' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'A7-story.' Also 'dorm which was an A7-story building' is acceptable; alternatively use 'in an A7-story dormitory.' Suggestion: 'in an A7-story building.'