Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, concise, and clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague words like "seizable" and incorrect verb forms.

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. However, I don't like them because they block my view and make the area feel crowded, so I prefer places with more open space.

제안: Give a clear yes/no or frequency answer first, then explain briefly with a specific reason and an example. Remove fillers and repeated words. Use linking words like "because" or "although."

예시: Not regularly. I rarely take photos of buildings because I usually prefer natural scenery; for example, I take pictures of parks and rivers when I go for walks.

제안: Answer directly and avoid contradicting yourself. Use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples of buildings you might visit and why. Use linking words like "however" or "for example."

예시: I can't think of a specific famous building I must visit, but there are a few tall buildings in Moscow I would like to see, such as the Moscow International Business Center, because I am interested in their modern architecture.

제안: Give a concise, well-structured answer: state your current preference, then explain the reason clearly with a specific detail. Correct grammar (tense, articles, plural forms) and avoid repetition.

예시: I wouldn't prefer to live in a tall building now. Five years ago I might have, but now I prefer a low-rise house because I value a calmer atmosphere and more outdoor space.

× Definitely is right, a lot of tall buildings near my home but I don't like it.

✓ Definitely. There are a lot of tall buildings near my home, but I don't like them.

The original sentence omits the correct 'there are' construction to state existence and uses 'it' to refer to plural 'buildings'. Use 'There are' for plural existence and 'them' as the plural pronoun. Also split into two clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: Use 'there is/there are' to introduce existence and match pronouns to singular/plural subjects.

× It looks very seizable from my eyes to appreciate the views that I had out of my window.

✓ It looks very sizable from my window to appreciate the views.

'Seizable' is the wrong adjective; 'sizable' (meaning large) is appropriate. 'From my eyes' is awkward; 'from my window' is clearer. 'To appreciate the views that I had out of my window' is wordy and mixes tense; simplify to 'to appreciate the views.' Suggestion: Choose correct adjectives and simplify prepositional phrases for clarity.

× I think now it's not a my primary goal to to do it every day.

✓ I think now it's not my primary goal to do it every day.

The sentence includes an unnecessary article 'a' before 'my', which is incorrect. Also contains a repeated 'to'. Remove the extra 'a' and duplicate 'to'. Suggestion: Check for redundant articles before possessive adjectives and remove duplicate words.

× I can all also be, uh, pursue this view but not appreciate it at all.

✓ I can also pursue this view, but not appreciate it at all.

The phrase 'all also be' is ungrammatical and redundant. Simplify to 'I can also pursue this view'. Maintain parallel structure with 'but not appreciate it at all.' Suggestion: Remove redundant words and ensure verbs follow modal/can properly.

× I think no, I can't name such a building that I want to visit.

✓ I don't think so; I can't name any building that I want to visit.

Starting with 'I think no' is awkward; 'I don't think so' is natural. 'Such a building' is formal; 'any building' fits the negative context. Keep present tense consistent. Suggestion: Use natural negative responses and appropriate determiners in negative sentences.

× But of course, in my living town in Moscow, there are a few tall buildings that I want to visit.

✓ But of course, in my hometown Moscow, there are a few tall buildings that I would like to visit.

'Living town' is incorrect; 'hometown' or 'the town where I live' is correct. 'Would like to visit' is a more natural conditional/desire form. Also remove unnecessary preposition 'in' before 'Moscow' when using 'hometown Moscow'. Suggestion: Use 'hometown' for the place you live and prefer 'would like' to express desire politely.

× Five years ago I would say yes, but now I can't can't say yes only because I want to to have come atmosphere around that surrounds me and this is not my priority to live in a tall buildings.

✓ Five years ago I would have said yes, but now I can't say yes, only because I want to have a calm atmosphere around me, and this is not my priority: living in a tall building.

'Would say' referring to the past should be 'would have said'. There are duplicate words ('can't can't', 'to to'). 'Come' is a misspelling of 'calm'. 'Have come atmosphere around that surrounds me' is ungrammatical; use 'have a calm atmosphere around me'. 'a tall buildings' mixes article and plural; use singular 'a tall building' or plural without 'a'. Rephrase final clause for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct past conditional forms, remove duplicates, correct spelling, match articles to nouns (a + singular), and simplify clauses for clarity.