Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., “Umm”). Start with a clear topic sentence and then add one specific detail. Use linking words briefly if needed.

예시: Yes. My neighbourhood has several tall residential blocks; in fact, I live in one of the high‑rise towers. Many of these apartments house families and have communal facilities like a rooftop garden.

제안: Give a direct answer and then provide a concise reason or exception. Avoid repeating phrases and use varied vocabulary (e.g., “not particularly” instead of “not really”).

예시: Not particularly. Because I grew up surrounded by skyscrapers, they seem ordinary to me; however, I sometimes photograph historic or unusually designed buildings for their architecture.

제안: Be specific and grammatically accurate. Give the building name correctly, state what attracts you, and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words to explain why.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree because it has an observation deck with panoramic city views. I’m interested in seeing the skyline from above and photographing the city at sunset.

제안: Provide a clear reason and avoid circular or repetitive phrasing. State one or two specific benefits (e.g., views, convenience) and link them logically.

예시: Yes, I would. Living in a high‑rise usually means easy access to city amenities and great views. For example, my current flat is close to shops and public transport, which makes daily life convenient.

× They are mostly residential buildings.

✓ They are mostly residential buildings.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. It uses plural correctly for 'buildings' and does not require an article.

× Umm, my home is one of those high rise blocks.

✓ Umm, my home is one of those high-rise blocks.

Hyphenation: 'high-rise' as a compound adjective before a noun should be hyphenated. Suggestion: use 'high-rise' when used attributively.

× There are many apartment towers where many families live.

✓ There are many apartment towers where many families live.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct and subject-verb agreement is fine.

× Not really, as I have been growing up in a city that's full of tall buildings and therefore I'm not really into those high rise towers.

✓ Not really, because I grew up in a city that was full of tall buildings, so I'm not very interested in those high-rise towers.

The original mixes present perfect continuous ('have been growing up') with the intended meaning of a past experience. Use simple past 'grew up' for completed upbringing. Also replace 'as' with 'because' or 'so' for clarity, and hyphenate 'high-rise'. Use 'interested' instead of informal 'into' for formality.

× Yes, I would like to visit the skyscraper in Tokyo in Japan which is called 191 Tokyo Skyscrapers where offers a observation deck that.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the skyscraper in Tokyo, Japan, called '191 Tokyo Skyscraper', which has an observation deck.

Multiple issues: redundant 'in Tokyo in Japan' -> 'Tokyo, Japan'; awkward relative clause and word order: 'which is called' -> 'called'; 'where offers a observation deck that' is ungrammatical — use 'which has an observation deck'. Article 'a observation' should be 'an observation'. Use consistent singular 'skyscraper' and correct name formatting.

× Yes, I definitely want to continue living in a tall building because living in a tall building most likely means that you are in a big city living in a tall building within a big.

✓ Yes, I definitely want to continue living in a tall building because it most likely means living in a big city.

Original repeats 'living in a tall building' and ends with an incomplete phrase 'within a big.' Remove redundancy and collapse idea to 'it most likely means living in a big city.' Use pronoun 'it' to refer to living in a tall building. Ensure sentence is complete.