Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (e.g., 'an high' → 'a high', 'many two or three floor houses' → 'many two- or three-storey houses').

예시: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, I live in a high, multi-storey apartment block, while surrounding streets have two- or three-storey houses and villas. Because of these buildings, I enjoy city life with easy access to shops and transport.

제안: Organize your answer: give a direct yes/no, then one or two clear examples with correct names and simple descriptions. Use linking words like 'for example' and correct collocations ('take photos of', 'many types of'). Avoid unclear references and non-sequiturs.

예시: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings. For example, in Abu Dhabi I often photograph modern skyscrapers and the Sheikh Zayed Mosque because of its intricate architecture. I also enjoy capturing traditional painted facades when I travel.

제안: Make a concise response: state the building and one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Use correct superlatives and linking words, and avoid repetitions and fragments.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is the tallest building in the world and offers spectacular views. For example, I would go to the observation deck and then visit the nearby Dubai Mall and watch the Dubai Fountain in the evening.

제안: Answer directly, then give 2–3 specific reasons with linking words and correct grammar. Replace vague words ('securities') with 'security' and avoid repeating 'in a building'.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. Firstly, it is convenient because restaurants, shops and public transport are nearby. Secondly, many tall buildings offer good security and facilities, which makes me feel safer.

× I live in an high apartment with many stories.

✓ I live in a high apartment with many stories.

Use 'a' before consonant sounds and 'an' before vowel sounds. 'High' begins with a consonant sound, so 'a' is correct. Suggestion: choose 'a' for words starting with consonant sounds.

× Also my neighborhood has many two or three floor houses, villas.

✓ Also my neighborhood has many two- or three-floor houses and villas.

When using compounds like 'two- or three-floor', hyphens clarify the shared noun. Also include a conjunction 'and' before 'villas' for parallel structure. Suggestion: use hyphens for compound modifiers and maintain parallel structure.

× Also, I like living in the city.

✓ I also like living in the city.

Placement of 'also' is flexible but commonly placed before the main verb for natural English. Moving 'also' before 'like' improves sentence flow. Suggestion: position adverbs like 'also' before the main verb in simple sentences.

× I love to live here so.

✓ I love living here.

The phrase 'so' is unnecessary and awkward. Use the gerund 'living' with 'love' for natural expression. Suggestion: omit 'so' or rephrase as 'I really love living here.'

× Yes, sometime I take photos of buildings in Abu Dhabi city we have many type of tall buildings also beautiful buildings.

✓ Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings in Abu Dhabi city; we have many types of tall and beautiful buildings.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and plural 'types'. Also separate clauses with punctuation and use 'tall and beautiful buildings' for parallel adjectives. Suggestion: use correct adverb form and pluralize 'type' to 'types'.

× For example Sheikh Zayed mosque coin building is very beautiful.

✓ For example, the Sheikh Zayed Mosque building is very beautiful.

Proper nouns for buildings often take 'the' and 'Mosque' is a noun that is capitalized. The original phrase 'coin building' is unclear; assuming 'building' is intended. Suggestion: use 'the' with specific landmarks and capitalize proper nouns.

× Sadia Thailand is also a it has a culture of paintings, art of paintings also we have.

✓ In Saudi Arabia and Thailand, there is a strong culture of paintings and art.

Original sentence is unclear and fragmented. 'Sadia' seems incorrect; possibly meant 'Saudi' or 'Saudi Arabia'. Combine ideas into a clear sentence and use 'there is' for existence. Suggestion: identify correct country names and restructure into one coherent sentence.

× Yes, I would like to visit Burj Khalifa it's a very tallest building hole in the world so a fun In the weekend I like to visit Burj Khalifa I go to the mall, Dubai mall and often watch Dubai fountain view it's very.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa; it is the tallest building in the world, so it is fun to visit. On weekends I like to go to the Dubai Mall and often watch the Dubai Fountain; the view is very impressive.

Use 'the tallest' for superlative. Remove 'very' before 'tallest' because 'tallest' already expresses superlative. Use articles ('the Burj Khalifa', 'the Dubai Mall', 'the Dubai Fountain') and split into coherent sentences. 'Hole' and other words were incorrect. Suggestion: use correct superlative form, proper articles, and break run-on sentences.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building as tall buildings are in the city.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because tall buildings are in the city.

Use 'because' for reason instead of 'as' in spoken answers for clarity. The article 'a' before 'tall building' is fine. Suggestion: use 'because' to express reasons more clearly.

× In city we have many options like restaurants, shopping malls and public transport.

✓ In the city we have many options like restaurants, shopping malls, and public transport.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'city' when referring to a specific city (your city). Add commas for a list. Suggestion: include 'the' when talking about a particular city.

× So I would prefer living in the in a building because it provide many facilities like securities and it is safe to live in a building.

✓ So I would prefer living in a building because it provides many facilities like security, and it is safe to live there.

Remove duplicated 'the in a'. Use singular verb 'provides' to agree with singular subject 'it' or use 'buildings provide' for plural. 'Securities' is incorrect; use 'security'. Use 'there' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct noun forms.