Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., "because I am because I am"). Use linking words like "so" or "because" correctly. Mention a brief example or feeling to support your answer.

예시: No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a small village. I prefer the open countryside and I sometimes feel anxious when I look at very tall buildings, so I avoid visiting places with skyscrapers.

제안: Answer directly and give a specific reason with a linking phrase. Avoid repeating ideas and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., "I do not usually watch any kind of building"). Add a short example of what you photograph to give more concrete detail.

예시: No, I rarely photograph buildings because I prefer capturing natural scenes. For example, I often take pictures of sunrises and sunsets over the hills, which I find calming compared with tall city structures.

제안: State your main point clearly, then support it with specific details and correct tense/use of articles. Use linking words such as "because" and "so" to connect ideas. Give one concrete example of a place you prefer and how you share your photos to make the answer more vivid.

예시: No, there isn't a particular building I want to visit because I prefer mountains and the sea. Whenever I have time I go hiking or to the coast to photograph sunrises and sunsets, and then I share the best photos with my friends on social media.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar. Replace repetitive phrases and use linking words like "because" and "so" properly. Provide a brief comparison to illustrate why village life suits you better.

예시: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I prefer village life. The countryside is quieter and more peaceful, and tall buildings make me feel uneasy, so I choose a small house rather than an apartment in the city.

× No, I live in a small village so near my house there are no more tall buildings and I also do not like to watch the tall building views because I am because I am so feeling anxiety when I see the tall buildings from anywhere.

✓ No, I live in a small village, so there are no tall buildings near my house, and I also do not like looking at tall buildings because I feel anxious when I see them.

Errors: 'there are no more tall buildings' is unnatural; 'tall building views' is incorrect noun phrase; repetition 'because I am because I am so feeling anxiety' is grammatically wrong; 'see the tall buildings from anywhere' is awkward. Suggestions: use plural/singular correctly ('tall buildings' and 'them'), place adjectives after articles properly, eliminate repetition, use 'feel anxious' instead of 'feeling anxiety', and order phrases naturally. Keep tense present simple for habitual statement.

× No, I do not take any kind of photos of the buildings because I am fond of capturing the changing nature views like sunrise and sunset and I am do not usually watch any kind of building because I feel anxious when I go beside the buildings.

✓ No, I do not take photos of buildings because I prefer capturing changing natural scenes like sunrises and sunsets, and I do not usually look at buildings because I feel anxious when I go near them.

Errors: 'capturing the changing nature views' uses awkward noun order and 'nature' should be adjective 'natural'; 'I am do not usually watch' is ungrammatical and contains wrong auxiliary; 'watch' is wrong verb for looking at buildings; 'go beside the buildings' should be 'go near them'. Suggestions: use present simple for preferences, 'prefer' and gerund 'capturing', correct auxiliary use ('do not'), choose appropriate verbs ('look at' or 'see'), and use pronoun 'them' for repeated noun.

× No, there is not any kind of building that I like to visit because I am fond of mountains and sea. And whenever I get the time I visited there because I am fond of capturing the nature's changing movements like sunrise and sunset and it all.

✓ No, there is no building that I would like to visit because I prefer mountains and the sea. Whenever I have time, I go there to capture changing natural scenes like sunrises and sunsets.

Errors: 'there is not any kind of building that I like to visit' is awkward; mix of present preference and past tense 'I visited there' is inconsistent. Use conditional/modal for hypothetical desires ('would like') and present simple for habitual actions ('I go there'). 'Nature's changing movements' is unnatural; use 'changing natural scenes'. Remove filler 'and it all.' Suggestions: maintain consistent tense, use 'prefer', and correct noun phrases.

× And I also share these movements, photographs, movements with my friends.

✓ I also share these photographs of natural scenes with my friends.

Errors: repeated and vague noun 'movements' is incorrect for photos; pronoun and noun placement unclear. Use specific noun phrase 'photographs of natural scenes' and avoid repetition. Keep sentence concise.

× No, I do not want to live in a tall building because I am fond of living in a house which is in the village because the village life is much pleasant and calm then rather than the buildings in the towns.

✓ No, I do not want to live in a tall building because I prefer living in a house in a village; village life is much more pleasant and calm than life in towns.

Errors: word order and comparative form: 'much pleasant' should be 'much more pleasant'; 'then rather than' is incorrect, use 'than'. Redundant clauses and awkward phrasing. Use present simple for general preference and correct comparative structure 'more pleasant and calm than'.

× And I am feeling uneasy when I go beside the tall building, so I avoid for getting there.

✓ I feel uneasy when I go near tall buildings, so I avoid going there.

Errors: 'go beside the tall building' uses wrong preposition 'beside' and singular mismatch; 'avoid for getting there' is ungrammatical—'avoid' should be followed by gerund 'going'. Also use plural 'tall buildings' or specify. Suggestions: use 'near' for proximity, use gerund after 'avoid', and keep tense consistent with present simple.