Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about the buildings (e.g., number of storeys or purpose). Use one linking phrase if you add a reason. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. There are many tall apartment blocks near my home; most are around 10–12 storeys and house young families. Because I live on the outskirts, these buildings provide most local services like small shops and laundries.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific example. Avoid filler words and hesitations; correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., "because they are quite ordinary"). Use a linking word to introduce exceptions.

예시: Not usually, because most apartments and malls look quite ordinary. However, I do take photos when a building has unusual architecture or colorful decorations, such as an old temple or a modern art museum.

제안: Start with a direct answer and add a specific example and reason. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "historical buildings with rich histories") and one linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit historical buildings with rich histories, such as old forts or colonial-era mansions. I enjoy learning about past events and stories, so visiting a well-preserved museum or fortress would be fascinating.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar ("we frequently have earthquakes"), and provide one specific reason and an example of the consequence. Avoid repeating words and keep it concise.

예시: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building, because Taiwan often has earthquakes and living high up can be frightening. For example, during tremors the swaying felt on upper floors makes me feel unsafe.

× It's mostly apartments 'cause I'm living in the outskirts of town and here are mostly people who live here.

✓ It's mostly apartments because I live on the outskirts of town and there are mostly people living here.

Plural/singular and phrasing: 'the outskirts' requires 'on the outskirts of town' not 'in the outskirts'. 'I'm living' is acceptable but simple present 'I live' fits habitual situation. 'here are mostly people who live here' is redundant and awkward; use 'there are mostly people living here' to show plural subject and correct word order.

× I don't really take photos of buildings like apartment or mall 'cause they are really. Normal but if there are cute buildings or unique buildings then I will take the photos of of them.

✓ I don't really take photos of buildings like apartments or malls because they are really normal, but if there are cute or unique buildings then I will take photos of them.

Present participle/word form and plurals: 'apartment or mall' should be plural when speaking generally ('apartments or malls'). Remove the stray period after 'really'. 'the photos of of them' has duplicate 'of' and unnecessary article; use 'photos of them'. Keep consistent simple present for habits and future with 'will' for intention.

× I would love to visit some historical building that remains a lot of history and some cool story that I can learn from and also some interesting or unique building.

✓ I would love to visit some historical buildings that contain a lot of history and interesting stories that I can learn from, and also other interesting or unique buildings.

Count nouns: use plural 'buildings' and 'stories' when speaking generally. 'remains a lot of history' is awkward; use 'contain a lot of history' or 'have many historical stories'. Rephrase for parallel structure.

× I don't want to live in a tall building actually 'cause in Taiwan, that's where I live, we frequently has earthquake and living in a tall building, especially in the high level of the building, it's really scary when we have the earthquake, earthquake.

✓ I don't want to live in a tall building actually, because in Taiwan, where I live, we frequently have earthquakes, and living in a tall building, especially on the higher floors, is really scary when there is an earthquake.

Subject-verb agreement and plurality: 'we frequently has' should be 'we frequently have' (have matches plural subject 'we'). 'earthquake' should be plural 'earthquakes' when speaking generally. Use 'on the higher floors' not 'in the high level of the building'. Also fix clause agreement: 'living ... is really scary' uses correct verb 'is' for the gerund subject, and 'when there is an earthquake' is the correct impersonal construction.