Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (word order, articles, comparatives) and avoid repetition. Give one specific detail (name, height, location) and use linking words if needed. For example, say the building name, state its height precisely, and explain why it is significant in one or two short supporting sentences.

예시: Yes. There is a very tall landmark near my home called the Berlin Tower, which has about 70 floors. Because of its height and unique design, it is one of the most recognizable buildings in the city and a national symbol.

제안: Start with a concise topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give a specific reason and example. Use a linking word to connect your reason and an example (e.g., because, for example). Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, I do. I often photograph interesting buildings because I like to remember architectural details and share them on social media; for example, I recently photographed an old colonial library because of its carved façade.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the building and a brief reason why you want to visit. Correct repetitions and filler words, and include one specific detail about the building (feature, activity, or location) to make the answer richer.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Vietnam because it is the tallest building in the country and has an observation deck where visitors can enjoy panoramic views of the city.

제안: Answer directly, fix grammar (use infinitives and correct noun forms), and avoid repeating the same idea. Offer one concrete advantage and, if possible, a drawback for balance. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use linking words (because, however).

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would give me breathtaking views of the city. However, I might worry about higher costs or longer elevator waits.

× Yes, of course this is a landmark.

✓ Yes, of course; this is a landmark.

The sentence needs punctuation to separate clauses and improve clarity. Add a semicolon or period after 'of course' to avoid a run-on feel. This is a sentence-level clarity/structure fix (treated as adjective/adverb placement because 'of course' is a sentence adverb). Use: 'Yes, of course; this is a landmark.'

× Berlin is around 70 floors and this is one of the most tallest building in my country and this is a symbol of my country city.

✓ The Berlin building has around 70 floors; it is one of the tallest buildings in my country and a symbol of my city.

Errors: 'most tallest' is incorrect (double comparative); 'building' should be plural after 'one of the'; word order and articles are wrong ('my country city' is incorrect). Correct by using 'one of the tallest buildings' and improve sentence structure. Also add 'the' before 'Berlin building' or name properly and use 'city' not 'country city'.

× Yes, definitely.

✓ Yes, definitely.

No grammatical change needed. Kept for completeness; 'definitely' is correctly used as an adverb here.

× The first thing that comes to my mind is that I always take the photos whenever I see any buildings because I want to save the photos of buildings and I always snap and always see the buildings.

✓ The first thing that comes to my mind is that I always take photos whenever I see interesting buildings because I want to save the memories; I often snap pictures of buildings.

Original is repetitive and awkward. Remove unnecessary articles ('the photos' -> 'photos'), avoid repeating 'always' and 'buildings', and use 'snap pictures' which is a common collocation. Improve coherence by linking purpose ('save the memories').

× Umm, yes, of course this is a symbol of symbol of Vietnam.

✓ Umm, yes, of course; this is a symbol of Vietnam.

Repetition 'symbol of symbol' is an error. Add punctuation after 'of course' for clarity.

× So the landmark 81 is one of my favorite buildings in my country and I really like to well, want to see this because it's also a tourist attraction in my country.

✓ The Landmark 81 is one of my favorite buildings in my country, and I really want to see it because it is also a tourist attraction.

Problems: 'like to well, want to' is disfluent and incorrect; use 'want to see it' or 'would like to see it'. 'See this' should be 'see it'. Remove repeated 'in my country'. Capitalize proper noun 'Landmark 81'.

× Actually, I would say that I really want to live in a tall building because it's allowed me to breathtaking views and I can see the city from the tall views and I have another views to from the tall buildings, so I think.

✓ Actually, I would say that I really want to live in a tall building because it would allow me to have breathtaking views; I could see the city from the high floors.

Errors: 'it's allowed me to breathtaking views' is incorrect verb form and meaning. Use conditional/modal 'would allow me to have' to express potential. 'Tall views' is incorrect noun phrase; use 'high floors' or 'upper floors'. Remove 'another views to from' which is ungrammatical. Simplify and use correct verb forms and noun phrases.