Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: まず、文法と語順を直して自然な主語＋述語の構造にしてください。余計な語（many other）や重複を避け、場所の表現は簡潔に述べます。また、接続表現を一つ加えて理由や詳しい位置を付け加えると良いです。発音で「exist」「station」などの語の音に注意してください。

예시: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my house, especially around the train station, because that area has many shops and offices.

제안: まず主語と動詞を自然な語順で結び、複数形・冠詞を正しく使いましょう。重複した語（sometimes, sometimes）を避け、理由を述べる際は接続詞で繋げて論理的にします。具体例を一つ入れると説得力が増します。

예시: Sometimes I do. When I visit a new place, I often photograph interesting buildings, especially traditional temples or modern skyscrapers, because their design is fascinating.

제안: まず単数・複数と冠詞（a/the）を正しく使ってください。建物名や場所の言い方を明確にし、理由を一文で述べた後に将来の計画を自然な表現で繋げましょう。冗長な“So”の繰り返しを避けます。

예시: Yes. I would like to visit the temples in Thailand because they are very colorful and have traditional architectural details, so I am planning a trip there next year.

제안: 否定の表現は簡潔にし、自然な語順（I don't like high places）を使ってください。“prefer”は比較構文で使うか、単に“I don't prefer”は避けると良いです。また“walk in tour building”は意味が不明瞭なので、単に“tall buildings”や“high-rise apartments”など明確な語を選びましょう。理由も一文で述べると良いです。

예시: No, I don't. I don't like high places, so I wouldn't want to live in a high-rise apartment; I prefer a low-rise house where I feel more comfortable.

× Of course, many other buildings are exist in near my house especially and they are located near the station I think.

✓ Of course, many buildings exist near my house, especially near the station, I think.

The original sentence misuses plural construction and word order. 'Many other buildings are exist' is incorrect because 'exist' does not follow an auxiliary 'are' here; use 'many buildings exist' or 'there are many buildings'. Also 'in near my house' is wrong preposition order; use 'near my house'. Combine clauses with commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'many buildings exist near my house' or 'there are many buildings near my house, especially near the station.'

× Sometimes, yes, especially I take photos of building when I visit new place because sometimes there are traditional buildings or modern buildings.

✓ Sometimes, yes, especially I take photos of buildings when I visit new places because there are sometimes traditional or modern buildings.

Use plural 'buildings' and 'places' for general statements (singular/plural issue). Also 'visit new place' needs an article or plural; use 'new places'. Word order: 'there are sometimes' is more natural. No continuous '-ing' correction required beyond maintaining verbs; keep 'visit' as base form after 'when'. Suggestion: Say 'I take photos of buildings when I visit new places' and place 'sometimes' correctly.

× It is fascinating.

✓ They are fascinating.

The pronoun 'It' refers to 'buildings' earlier, which is plural; use 'They are fascinating.' Suggestion: Match pronoun number to its antecedent.

× Yes, one of the building is Thailand temples because they are very colorful and traditional structure.

✓ Yes, one of the buildings is Thai temples because they are very colorful and have traditional structures.

'One of the building' should be 'one of the buildings' (plural after 'one of'). However the meaning is unclear: if the student means 'one type of building I like is Thai temples', better: 'One type of building I like is Thai temples.' Also 'Thailand temples' should be 'Thai temples'. 'Traditional structure' needs plural or rephrasing 'have traditional structures.' Suggestion: Clarify by saying 'One type of building I like is Thai temples because they are very colorful and have traditional designs.'

× So I would like to see them. So I will plan.

✓ So I would like to see them, and I will plan a visit.

'I will plan' is incomplete; 'plan' needs an object like 'a visit'. Combine sentences for fluency. Tense is acceptable but add object to make it grammatical. Suggestion: Use 'I will plan a visit' or 'I will make plans to visit them.'

× No actually I don't like heights place so I don't prefer living in a tall building.

✓ No, actually I don't like heights, so I don't prefer living in a tall building.

'Heights place' is incorrect collocation. Use 'heights' alone or 'places with heights' (awkward). Better: 'I don't like heights' expresses fear of high places. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Say 'I don't like heights, so I prefer not to live in a tall building.'

× Also I will avoid walk in tour building.

✓ Also, I will avoid walking tours of tall buildings.

The original has incorrect verb form and word order. 'Avoid walk in tour building' should use gerund after 'avoid': 'avoid walking'. 'Walk-in tour building' is not natural; likely meant 'walking tours of buildings' or 'touring tall buildings on foot'. Suggestion: Say 'I will avoid walking tours of tall buildings' or 'I will avoid touring tall buildings.'