Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğal ve akıcı olmalı; gramer ve kelime hatalarını düzeltin, gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve kısa tutup doğrudan bilgi verin. Örneğin, 'in my religion' yerine 'in my area' demelisiniz ve '16 floors' ifadesini 'on the 16th floor' şeklinde kullanın. Bağlaçlarla cümleleri mantıklı şekilde birleştirin.

예시: No, there aren't any near my home, but there are many around my workplace. I work in general management, and my office is on the 16th floor, so I often see tall buildings nearby.

제안: Cümle zamanlarına dikkat edin (present habit vs past event). 'You' yanlış kullanılmış; muhtemelen 'them' veya 'the view' demek istediniz. Daha spesifik olun: ne zaman, ne tür binalar, neden fotoğraf çektiğinizi belirtin. Tekrarlardan kaçının.

예시: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings. When I first started working on the 16th floor I was excited and I took several pictures of the skyline and nearby modern buildings.

제안: Cümleleriniz karışık ve anlaşılması zor. 'Challenge the tower' ifadesi yerine hangi kuleyi kastettiğinizi açıkça söyleyin (ör. Galata Tower). Yer bilgilerini düzgün sırayla verin ve bağlaçlar kullanarak düşünceleri bağlayın. Daha net betimlemeler ekleyin.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Galata Tower in Istanbul. I think it has beautiful views, and from there you can see a panoramic view of the Bosphorus and the city.

제안: Daha düzenli bir yapı kullanın: açık bir konu cümlesi, sonra nedenler. Dilbilgisi: 'I didn't and I I don't' yerine 'I have never wanted to' veya 'I don't want to' kullanın. 'Single house' yerine 'a single-family house' veya 'a detached house' deyin. Nedenlerinizi somut örneklerle destekleyin.

예시: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I prefer a detached house because I dislike crowded, noisy areas and I enjoy being close to nature, such as forests and gardens.

× No there aren't, but there are near my workplace.

✓ No, there aren't any near my home, but there are some near my workplace.

The original sentence omits the pronoun/determiner required with 'there are' for countable plural nouns. Use 'any' in negative clauses referring to unspecified plural nouns and 'some' in affirmative context. Also 'home' clarifies the location and matches the examiner's question.

× I am working in general management so in my religion a lot of tall buildings.

✓ I work in general management, so in my region there are a lot of tall buildings.

Use simple present 'I work' for habitual job. 'Religion' is incorrect; likely intended 'region'. The clause describing existence requires 'there are' + plural noun. Word order was wrong.

× I'm working at 16 floors.

✓ I work on the 16th floor.

Use 'on' with floors of a building and the ordinal form '16th' for a specific floor; use simple present for a job location.

× Yes, I took photos of building when I went to work in my first time.

✓ Yes, I took photos of the building when I went to work for the first time.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'building' if a specific building is meant. Use the phrase 'for the first time' to express the initial occasion. Word order and articles were incorrect.

× I was excited and I took photos of you from 16th floors.

✓ I was excited and I took photos from the 16th floor.

'You' is incorrect unless addressing someone; likely meant 'photos of the view' so omit the object or specify 'of the view'. Also use singular 'the 16th floor' and ordinal form.

× Yes, I want to challenge the tower.

✓ Yes, I want to visit/try climbing the tower.

'Challenge the tower' is unnatural; use 'visit the tower' or 'try climbing the tower' depending on intended meaning. 'Want to' expresses desire correctly but verb choice was wrong.

× I think if I go I it is beautiful.

✓ I think if I go there, it will be beautiful.

Original has extra pronoun 'I' and incorrect tense. Use 'if I go there' and future 'it will be beautiful' to express expectation about a future visit.

× Where in Istanbul city and Bosphorus village I wonder in panoramic Istanbul stereo.

✓ It's located in Istanbul city near the Bosphorus; I imagine a panoramic view of Istanbul.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Reorder to subject-verb structure and use 'imagine' or 'I wonder' correctly. 'Panoramic view of Istanbul' is the correct phrase.

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building, for example, Dubai and New York.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building, for example in cities like Dubai or New York.

Add preposition 'in' before city examples and use 'cities like' to clarify examples. Present tense 'don't want' is correct.

× I didn't and I I don't, sorry, because I don't like crowded and noisy.

✓ I never did, and I don't now, sorry, because I don't like crowded and noisy places.

Use 'never did' for past habits; avoid repeating 'I'. Add 'places' after 'crowded and noisy' to make adjectives modify a noun. 'I don't' should be completed as 'I don't now' or 'I still don't.'

× I like forest. I want to single house.

✓ I like forests. I want a single-family house.

Use plural 'forests' or 'the forest' depending on meaning. 'Single house' is unnatural; 'single-family house' or 'detached house' are correct terms. Add article 'a'.