Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然且不连贯，存在大量犹豫词（umm, uh）和重复，信息也不够具体。建议在开头用一句明确的主题句直接回答问题，然后用1–2句补充细节（例如大楼的功能、外观或位置）。避免不必要的填充词，使用连词使句子更连贯。可练习准备几种描述常见建筑的短句并用来替换犹豫词。

예시: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, one called Father Dasha is about thirty stories high and houses classrooms and offices. Because it is so close, many people come and go from that building every day.

제안: 表达含糊且语法混乱。建议先直接回答频率，然后给出具体原因和例子（例如玻璃幕墙、独特造型或光线效果）。使用连词（because, so, for example）组织句子，避免重复和不完整句。练习把想法分成简短完整句子。

예시: I don't take photos of buildings very often, only when a building looks unusual or striking. For example, a nearby office tower has a glass facade that reflects light in an interesting way, so I sometimes photograph it to capture that effect.

제안: 回答不清晰且偏离话题，句子不完整且逻辑混乱。建议直接回答“是否想去”，若不想去，给出简洁明确的理由（比如功能、费用、兴趣不大）。使用简单句并加一两个支持细节，避免无关信息。

예시: No, there isn't a particular building I want to visit. I prefer places that are open to the public, and many nearby buildings are private offices or classrooms, so visiting them wouldn't be interesting to me.

제안: 回答较为直接，给出了个人偏好和理由，但表达有语法错误和重复。建议使用一到两句支持性细节并用连接词（because, so）使逻辑清晰。可改正“introverted person”表述为“I'm an introvert”，并删去矛盾/多余的短语。

예시: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building; I prefer a cottage because high-rise apartments feel crowded. I'm an introvert, so I value privacy, and I also worry about safety in tall buildings.

× Yes, they are. It's just outside my beauty there is umm, uh, the building is called uh, father Dasha and it was very tall about uh, 30 levels and there are so many. Uh. Classrooms and some companies uh, so yes, overall there are so many people uh into into this building and out so I think.

✓ Yes, there are. Just outside my beauty salon there is a building called Father Dasha; it is very tall, about 30 stories. There are many classrooms and some companies, so overall many people go in and out of this building.

原句中定冠词和不定冠词使用不当（例如“It's just outside my beauty”和“the building is called”前后表述混乱）。应使用可数名词的正确形式并在首次提到特定事物时用不定冠词或直接指明名词（如“a building”或“the building”在已知情境下）。同时将口语填充词去除并理顺句子结构，便于表达清晰。建议：第一次提到某建筑用“a building”，已知特定建筑可用“the building”；将“levels”替换为“stories”。

× Not very often, except I'm at some building. I think the appearance is very special or make me shocked.

✓ Not very often, except when I'm at a building whose appearance is very special or shocking.

原句时态和从句连接不正确，使用现在进行时“I’m at some building”不自然，应使用时间状语从句“when I'm at a building”。“make me shocked”用法生硬，改为形容词“shocking”或短语“makes me feel shocked”。建议：用when引导条件状语，使用形容词修饰名词或使用动词短语表达感受。

× Umm yes, because, uh, there are so many buildings are the services are made of so the whole glasses.

✓ Yes, because many buildings have facades made entirely of glass.

原句中介词和句子结构混乱（例如“are the services are made of so the whole glasses”没有意义）。应使用“made of glass”来表示材料，或“have facades of glass”表示建筑外墙由玻璃构成。建议：用“made of”或“of glass”来表达材料，保持主谓一致并去掉多余词。

× So it will be uh very light that. Can make me see it clearly and I also think use the camera, couldn't take it very clearly.

✓ So it will be very bright and easy to see clearly, but I think my camera can't capture it very clearly.

原句副词位置和句子拆分不当（如“Can make me see it clearly”缺主语，“couldn't take it very clearly”时态与情态混乱）。应置入主语并使用情态动词“can't”或“couldn't”与上下文一致。建议：将副词放在动词之后或句尾，确保主语存在并统一时态/情态。

× MMM, no, I don't, but to be honest, uh, disputing us are so many company or some classroom, uh, to provide it some children to have some lessons and uh, perhaps they will pay so much money, umm.

✓ No, I don't. To be honest, there are many companies and some classrooms that provide lessons for children, and perhaps they charge a lot of money.

原句时态和动词形式混乱（如“disputing us are so many company”不合语法），应使用一般现在时表事实并用正确的动词（provide, charge）。名词复数形式也需调整（company → companies）。建议：用“there are”引出存在句，注意名词复数和动词的一致性。

× So they they needn't to get. So I don't like to go there.

✓ So they don't need to go there, and I don't like to go there either.

原句中情态动词与不定式搭配错误（“needn't to get”应为“don't need to go”或“needn't go”），并存在重复词。建议：使用正确的情态动词结构，如“don't need to + 动词原形”或“needn't + 动词原形”，并删除多余重复。

× No, I don't, I prefer to live in a cottage because I think the tall building will be very crowded.

✓ No, I don't. I prefer to live in a cottage because I think tall buildings are very crowded.

原句代词和数的一致性问题（“the tall building will be very crowded”在泛指情境下应使用复数或不带定冠词）。建议：谈一般情况时使用复数名词或不加定冠词。

× I might introverted person, so I don't like to take or communicate with to meet people.

✓ I might be an introverted person, so I don't like meeting or communicating with people.

缺少系动词“be”和不定冠词“an”；动名词形式“meeting/communicating”更自然，原句中“to take or communicate with to meet people”结构混乱。建议：使用“be + 名词” 表示身份，用动名词表达不喜欢做的动作，并删除多余不定式短语。

× And uh, I also think it's not not very safe, even though I think, even though I know this idea was not very awesome, uh, not true, but yes, I always think it's not very safe.

✓ And I also think it's not very safe. Although I know this idea may not be completely accurate, I still feel it's unsafe.

原句存在时态和重复表达问题（双重否定“not not very safe”，以及“was not very awesome”时态不当）。应使用一般现在时表达持续感觉，并用简洁句子避免重复。建议：用简单句表达观点，用“may not be completely accurate”表示不确定性。