Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence about whether there are tall buildings, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Correct inaccuracies and avoid filler words. For example, name the area correctly and describe types of buildings and proximity.

예시: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home because I live between central Tokyo and Kachidoki. For instance, many older commercial buildings and a few modern apartment towers stand within a five-minute walk from my house.

제안: Answer directly and give a specific reason and an example. Use correct verb forms and linking words (because, for example). Avoid vague statements and unfinished sentences.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I admire their design and structure. For example, I like photographing the façades of skyscrapers at sunset because the light highlights their details.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (remove unnecessary prepositions), and add one or two specific details such as height, reason to visit, or activities there. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Tokyo Skytree because it is the tallest tower in Japan, standing about 634 meters high. I want to go to the observation deck to see panoramic views of Tokyo and take photos.

제안: Give a concise direct answer, correct tense and pronoun errors, and explain reasons with linking words (because, so). Limit to two or three sentences and include a specific reason or example.

예시: Yes, I would. I grew up in high-rise apartments in Tokyo, so I am used to living in tall buildings and prefer them because they are convenient and often have good views.

× Yes, my home town is located middle of Tokyo and cold Kachuki city and there's like the old buildings in the area is very tall including my.

✓ Yes, my hometown is located between central Tokyo and Kachigai City, and there are many old buildings in the area that are very tall, including the one near my home.

Multiple errors: 'located middle of' should be 'located between' (preposition and phrase structure) and 'home town' should be 'hometown' (spelling). The clause 'there's like the old buildings in the area is very tall' mixes 'there is' construction with a plural subject and a relative clause. Use 'there are' for plural and restructure: 'there are many old buildings... that are very tall.' Also 'including my' is incomplete; specify 'including the one near my home.' Suggestions: use 'there are' with plural nouns, place relative clauses after the noun, and ensure nouns agree in number.

× Yes I do umm the tall building are very cool to me and I have no idea how the tall buildings is survived. Umm there is.

✓ Yes, I do. Umm, tall buildings are very cool to me, and I have no idea how the tall buildings survived.

Errors: 'the tall building are' mixes singular article 'the' + singular noun with plural verb; should be 'tall buildings are' or 'the tall building is'. 'How the tall buildings is survived' uses incorrect verb form and agreement. Use simple past 'survived' if asking how they remained standing, or passive past participle 'are preserved' for ongoing condition. Removed the fragment 'Umm there is' which is incomplete. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use correct verb forms (past simple for 'survived' or present passive for preservation).

× Yes, I would like to visit to Tokyo Skytree, uh, which is located in Tokyo and it is highest building in Japan and I think it is 630.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Tokyo Skytree, which is located in Tokyo; it is the highest building in Japan and I think it is 634 meters tall.

Errors: 'visit to' is incorrect; use 'visit' without 'to' after 'would like to'. Missing definite article 'the highest building' is needed. The height '630' lacks units and is slightly inaccurate; Tokyo Skytree is 634 meters so specify units. Suggestions: drop unnecessary prepositions after 'visit', include articles before superlatives, and provide units for measurements.

× Umm, yes, I do. As I say, umm, I grew grow up in your tall buildings in Tokyo. So I think it's I go used to and I prefer living high buildings better than a house.

✓ Umm, yes, I do. As I said, I grew up in tall buildings in Tokyo, so I am used to them and I prefer living in high-rise buildings rather than in a house.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'As I say' should be past 'As I said' because referring to earlier statement. 'I grew grow up' duplicates forms; correct is 'I grew up'. 'in your tall buildings' is wrong pronoun; should be 'in tall buildings' or 'in the tall buildings' (not 'your'). 'It's I go used to' is incorrect; use 'I am used to them' (present state). 'living high buildings' needs preposition and noun form: 'living in high-rise buildings'. Also use 'rather than in a house' or 'rather than a house'. Suggestions: use correct past tense when referring back, avoid duplicate verbs, use correct pronouns, and use 'used to' construction for habitual familiarity.