Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 直接的な応答はできていますが、文法の誤り、語順の混乱、冗長表現が多く、明確で自然な英語になっていません。改善点：1) 主語と動詞の時制・一致を正す（例：There are not → There aren’t / There are no tall buildings）。2) 冗長な表現を削り、短い主文＋具体的な補足にする。3) “local area”や“skyscraper”の使い方を自然にする（a very rural/quiet area, skyscrapers）。4) 接続詞を使って論理をつなぐ（because, so）。例文は5文以内に収める。

예시: There aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a quiet, rural area. As a result, you won’t find skyscrapers or high-rise apartments nearby. The neighbourhood mainly has single-family houses and small shops, so the skyline is quite low.

제안: 内容は伝わりますが、語彙や文法の精度が低く、冗長な語句や反復（I I）があります。改善点：1) 頻度表現は“often”や“frequently”を使う。2) 過去の旅行について話すときは時制を統一する（I often take / When I travel, I take photos）。3) ネガティブとポジティブをつなぐときは接続詞を使う（but, because）。4) より具体的な理由や例を一文で加える。

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel. I’m not a big photography enthusiast, but I like photographing interesting architecture because the pictures help me remember the trips. For example, I took many shots of a historic cathedral on my last vacation.

제안: 回答は意図があるものの、固有名詞と場所の表現、時制、語順に問題があり意味が不明瞭です。改善点：1) 建物名や場所は正確に言う（例：Sacré-Cœur, Mont-Saint-Michel, or Notre-Dame）。2) 計画を表すときは時制を統一する（I would like to visit / I’m planning to visit）。3) 具体的な理由を短く付け加える（architectural style, historical importance, view）。4) 最大5文にまとめる。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Mont-Saint-Michel in France. It’s a famous historic abbey on a small island and is renowned for its spectacular architecture and sea views. I’ve been planning the trip with friends because we want to explore the medieval streets and take photos of the scenery.

제안: 意図は伝わるが、語法（such as high scraper）、単語選択（high scraper → skyscraper, flat house → detached house / bungalow）、文法（I want to will）に多数の誤りがあります。改善点：1) 主要な意見を明確な主文で述べる（I wouldn’t like to live in a skyscraper.）。2) 理由を具体的に短く述べる（I prefer a house with a garden to grow roses and olives）。3) 接続詞や理由を示す語（because, so）を正しく使う。4) 5文以内に収める。

예시: I wouldn’t want to live in a skyscraper. I prefer a detached house with a garden because I enjoy growing plants like roses and olive trees. Having greenery around me helps me relax, so a house with outdoor space suits me better than a high-rise apartment.

× Hmm, near my house there are not any taller buildings down my house because I'm lived in a very local area so there are not come on in higher buildings such as skyscraper.

✓ Hmm, near my house there are no tall buildings because I live in a very local area, so there are no high buildings such as skyscrapers.

The original sentence has several structural and grammatical problems: incorrect word order ('there are not any taller buildings down my house'), wrong verb form ('I'm lived' instead of 'I live'), and wrong phrasing ('there are not come on in higher buildings'). Suggested corrections: use 'there are no' to negate existence, use present simple 'I live' for a general fact, and use 'skyscrapers' plural and 'high buildings' for natural phrasing. Improve by simplifying clauses and using standard negation and verb forms. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I oftentimes for the SO building when I I travel when I went to trip.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel or when I go on a trip.

The original sentence has incorrect adverb choice and verb forms: 'oftentimes' is acceptable but 'often' is more natural; 'for the SO building' is unclear; repeated 'I'; mixing tenses 'when I travel' and 'when I went to trip'. Use present simple 'I often take photos' for habitual action, and 'when I travel' or 'when I go on a trip' consistently. Improve by removing repetitions and choosing consistent tense. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I am not a huge fan of photo, but taking a picture reminds me of the memory of the trip.

✓ I am not a huge fan of photography, but taking pictures reminds me of the memories from the trip.

'Photo' as a noun needs an article or should be plural/rather 'photography'. Use 'photography' for the activity, and plural 'pictures' and 'memories' for natural phrasing. Also use 'from the trip' or 'of the trip' for the source of memories. Improve by choosing correct noun forms and articles. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, I tried to visit my Shamanza Michel in France.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Sacré-Coeur in France.

The original name 'Shamanza Michel' seems incorrect; likely intended 'Sacré-Coeur' or 'Notre-Dame' or 'Sainte-Chapelle' or 'Mont Saint-Michel'. 'Tried to visit' indicates a past attempt; context asks which building you would like to visit, so use 'would like to visit'. Also use the definite article 'the' before a famous building. Improve by using correct building name and appropriate modal verb for desire. Grammar problem type ID:26

× It is located in a small high ending France and it is well known by spectacular appearance.

✓ It is located in a small region in France and it is well known for its spectacular appearance.

'Small high ending France' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'a small region in France' or 'a small town in France'. Use 'well known for' rather than 'well known by'. 'Spectacular appearance' is fine but 'for its spectacular appearance' is the correct collocation. Improve by using correct prepositions and natural noun phrases. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So I was planning with my friends to go there in my vacation.

✓ So I am planning with my friends to go there on my vacation.

Use present continuous 'I am planning' for current plans. Use 'on my vacation' rather than 'in my vacation' in English. 'Was planning' suggests past; use present when referring to upcoming trip. Improve by matching tense to the time frame and using correct preposition for 'vacation'. Grammar problem type ID:7

× Actually I don't want to live in a such as high scraper because I want to live in a flat house and I want to will plant such as roses and olives.

✓ Actually I don't want to live in such a skyscraper because I want to live in a flat house and I want to plant things like roses and olive trees.

Word order and articles: 'such a skyscraper' is correct order; 'high scraper' is incorrect (should be 'skyscraper'). Remove unnecessary modal 'will' after 'want to'. Use 'plant things like roses and olive trees'—'olive trees' is more natural than 'olives'. Improve by fixing noun forms, word order, and removing redundant verbs. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Glowing plants makes me feel relaxed so I'll try to house with a garden.

✓ Growing plants make me feel relaxed, so I'll try to live in a house with a garden.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Plants make' (not 'makes'). 'Glowing' is likely a wrong word; 'growing plants' or 'gardening' fits context. 'Try to house with a garden' is ungrammatical; use 'try to live in a house with a garden' or 'try to get a house with a garden'. Improve by correcting verb agreement, choosing the right gerund/noun, and fixing verb phrase for residence. Grammar problem type ID:27