Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 문법을 정리하고 핵심을 명확히 표현하세요. 간결한 주제 문장으로 답을 시작하고, 1~2개의 구체적 세부사항(예: 건물의 용도, 위치, 느낌)을 연결어(예: also, for example, because)를 사용해 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 발음 오류(중복 단어 제거)와 시제 일관성도 고치세요.

예시: Yes. I live in Seoul, the capital of South Korea, and there are many tall buildings nearby. For example, there are lots of office towers and high-rise apartments around the city center. Because the area is crowded, the skyline looks impressive but a bit overwhelming at times.

제안: 의도를 먼저 명확히 밝히고, 이유와 예시를 덧붙이세요. 불명확한 표현과 문법 오류를 제거하고, 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 논리성을 높이세요. 또한 단어 선택을 단순명료하게 바꾸세요(예: "not really"/"I don't usually").

예시: Not really. I don't usually take photos of buildings because most of the ones near me are quite plain. For example, many buildings are painted in neutral colors like white or grey, so they don't look very attractive in photos.

제안: 방문하고 싶은 건물을 정확히 말하고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 역사적 의미, 디자인, TV/영화에서 본 인상). 중복과 불분명한 표현을 제거하고, 연결어(for example, because, when I saw it)로 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

예시: I'd like to visit the Empire State Building in the United States. I first saw it in a TV show and I was impressed by its height and classic design. Because it has historical significance and great views from the observation deck, I think it would be amazing to visit.

제안: 의사(원함/원치 않음)을 명확한 주제문으로 제시하고, 이유를 2개 이하로 간결히 설명하세요(예: 좁은 공간, 소음, 편의시설). 불필요한 단어와 발음 오류를 제거하고 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하세요.

예시: No, I wouldn't like to live in a very tall building. In Korea, many high-rises have small studio apartments, so living space can feel cramped. Also, tall buildings can be noisy and lack privacy, so I prefer a low-rise house.

× Yeah, sure. I live in in Seoul, which is located at the capital of South Korea.

✓ Yeah, sure. I live in Seoul, which is the capital of South Korea.

The phrase 'located at the capital' is incorrect; use 'is the capital' to describe Seoul's status. Also remove duplicate 'in'. Use simple present to state facts.

× This city had some built tall building, especially the company and the apartment store and sometimes.

✓ This city has some tall buildings, especially office buildings and apartment complexes.

Use present tense 'has' to describe a current characteristic. 'Some built tall building' is ungrammatical; use plural 'tall buildings'. Replace 'company and the apartment store' with 'office buildings and apartment complexes' for clarity.

× That is crowded part of Korea and because it looks like a beautiful and overwhelming sometimes, but.

✓ That area is crowded, and sometimes it looks beautiful and overwhelming.

Sentence was fragmented and had misplaced conjunctions. Rearrange to a complete sentence with proper connectors and adverbs: 'that area is crowded, and sometimes it looks beautiful and overwhelming.' Remove dangling 'but.'

× Actually I'm not prepared to take photo of buildings, especially toward buildings.

✓ Actually I'm not used to taking photos of buildings, especially close-up of them.

'Not prepared to take photo' is awkward; use 'not used to taking photos' to express habit. Use gerund 'taking' after 'used to.' 'Toward buildings' is unclear; specify 'close-up of them.'

× Has the picture of the normal building for example in color was clay or white and Reese painting the the simple things.

✓ Pictures of ordinary buildings, for example in clay or white colors, show simple designs.

Original sentence lacks proper verb structure. Use plural 'pictures' and a simple present verb 'show.' Use gerund/participle forms properly and correct word order.

× And then always scare windows.

✓ And the windows always look plain.

'Scare windows' is nonsensical. Likely intended 'plain' or 'boring.' Use 'the windows always look plain' to make a coherent clause with correct pronoun/article usage.

× And I think that building is not beautiful, always normal thing.

✓ I think those buildings are not particularly beautiful; they are quite ordinary.

Use plural 'buildings' if referring generally. 'Always normal thing' is ungrammatical; replace with 'quite ordinary.' Use adverb 'particularly' for nuance.

× I would like to talk about I want to visit auto bidding coded empire reading in the United States that building well known for represents United States.

✓ I want to visit the Empire State Building in the United States because it is well known and represents the country.

The original is a jumble of words. Use clear noun phrase 'the Empire State Building' and a reason clause 'because it is well known and represents the country.' Maintain present tense desire 'I want to visit.'

× And then I watch the Kashgar drama and and then I can I couldn't see that that is beautiful.

✓ I watched a drama and saw that it looked beautiful.

Tense and modality were wrong and redundant. Use past tense 'watched' if referring to a past action, and 'saw that it looked beautiful' for clarity. Remove duplicate words.

× And then the great building and then very tall that.

✓ It is a great and very tall building.

Use a complete present-tense sentence: subject 'it' + linking verb 'is' + adjectives in correct order 'great and very tall.' Original lacks verb and has incorrect word order.

× I don't want to live in a tall building because tall building has some advantage bro living there.

✓ I don't want to live in a tall building because tall buildings have some advantages to living there.

Use plural 'buildings' to speak generally and match verb 'have.' Insert 'to' in phrase 'advantages to living there' and remove slang 'bro.' Maintain present tense negative 'don't want.'

× Toll bidding had some lots of room, especially one studio apartment in Korea in Always make some small room and then we can.

✓ Tall buildings have a lot of rooms; studio apartments in Korea are usually very small.

'Toll bidding' is a misspelling of 'tall buildings.' Use plural 'have a lot of rooms.' Clarify statement about studio apartments with present tense and correct adjective order. The original was fragmented and unclear.