Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar, avoid fillers and add a linking phrase for clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct plural/singular forms and prepositions, and add a brief reason or example.

예시: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small town, so most buildings are two or three storeys high. For example, the houses and shops on my street are only two floors, which makes the area feel quiet and spacious.

제안: Provide a clearer topic sentence and expand with a specific reason and example using a linking word. Replace vague phrase 'like coffee or nature' with 'such as' and a short explanation of why.

예시: Not really. I'm not very interested in architectural photography; I prefer taking photos of small details and nature. For instance, I often photograph my coffee and nearby parks because I enjoy capturing colours and textures.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and give specific reasons and linking words to support your choice. Correct minor grammar and add one or two concrete details about the building.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit Okada, which is one of the most famous hotels in the Philippines because of its luxurious design and entertainment options. For example, it has impressive fountains and a casino, so it's a great place to spend time with friends or family.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: give a clear reason with correct phrasing and a linking word, and avoid vague wording. Explain what 'difficult to go out' means (e.g., elevator crowding or distance to street).

예시: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because going out can be inconvenient, especially during busy hours when elevators are crowded. I prefer smaller buildings of two or three storeys because they feel more private and make it easier to leave the apartment quickly.

× 'I live in a small town so most of buildings are two or three floor.'

✓ 'I live in a small town, so most of the buildings are two- or three-storey.'

'Most of buildings' is missing the article 'the' before 'buildings' and 'floor' is a count noun that needs a plural or adjectival form. Use 'the buildings' for a specific group and 'two- or three-storey' (or 'two- or three-story') to describe their height. Also add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.

× 'No, I'm not really interested in buildings.'

✓ 'No, I'm not really interested in buildings.'

'I'm not really interested' is correct present simple use for a current preference. No correction needed; sentence is appropriate for the context.

× 'I prefer taking photos like coffee or nature.'

✓ 'I prefer taking photos of coffee or nature.'

'Like' is incorrect here; when describing the object of a photograph use the preposition 'of'. The gerund 'taking' is acceptable after 'prefer' when speaking about general habits, so change 'like' to 'of'.

× 'Yes, I have one building that I like to visit which is Okada, the most famous hotel here in the Philippines.'

✓ 'Yes, there is one building I would like to visit: Okada, the most famous hotel here in the Philippines.'

The original mixes present-tense 'have' with the intended meaning of a desire to visit. Use 'there is' or rephrase to 'I would like to visit' to match the question. Also use a colon or comma appropriately and remove the redundant 'that I like to visit which is' to improve clarity and flow.

× 'This is the great place to visit and spend time with friends or family.'

✓ 'It is a great place to visit and to spend time with friends or family.'

'This is the great place' sounds awkward; use 'It is a great place' or 'It's a great place' and include 'to' before 'spend' for parallel structure. Present simple is appropriate here to describe a general truth.

× 'No, I don't want to live in a tall building because it's difficult to go being out.'

✓ 'No, I don't want to live in a tall building because it's difficult to go out.'

'Go being out' is ungrammatical. Use the verb phrase 'go out' to express leaving the building. The rest of the sentence correctly uses third person singular contractions 'don't' and 'it's'.

× 'I prefer to small buildings like two or third floor.'

✓ 'I prefer small buildings, like two- or three-storey ones.'

After 'prefer' do not use the infinitive 'to' here; say 'I prefer small buildings'. 'Two or third floor' is incorrect: use 'two- or three-storey' or 'two- or three-storey buildings' and add 'ones' to avoid repetition. Include a comma before the example phrase.