Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., plural forms, prepositions, and tense). Use linking words like 'however' correctly to contrast ideas. Limit to up to 4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I live in the city centre, so there are many tall buildings near my home. However, it can be quite noisy at night because the main road is busy and people often walk past until late.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear reason or example. Fix grammar (use 'of' not 'on', plural agreement) and avoid repetition. Mention a specific building and a brief reason why you photograph it, using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing unusual buildings. For example, there is a famous scorpion sculpture near my house that is over five metres tall, and I like to capture its details because of its striking design.

제안: Be specific: name the building or type (e.g., a mall in the financial district) and give one clear, grammatically correct reason for wanting to visit. Use linking words ('because', 'so') and avoid filler words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a shopping mall in the financial district near my city. I want to see its unusual façade because it was designed by a famous architect and people say the interior is very impressive.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and support it with 1–2 specific advantages or disadvantages. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles, word choice). Use linking phrases ('for example', 'because', 'however') to connect ideas and avoid long, broken sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. For example, after moving to Canada I lived in a high-rise in the city centre, which was convenient for work and public transport, but it could be noisy at times.

× Yes, uh, I'm living in the middle of the city, so there, so I can see a lot of building around my house, but however, sometimes it is too noisy and until the midnight because I'm on the road there always umm, a lot of people always walk on the road.

✓ Yes, I live in the middle of the city, so I can see a lot of buildings around my house, but it is sometimes too noisy until midnight because there are always many people walking on the road.

Multiple issues: Use simple present (I live) for a permanent situation rather than present continuous; pluralize countable noun (buildings); remove redundant words (there, however); use 'until midnight' not 'until the midnight'; use 'there are' for existence and plural agreement; use 'many people walking' rather than repeating 'always' and 'walk on the road'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual facts, ensure noun plurality, and simplify redundant phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, I would like to take a photo on this on a unique building. So near my house there are unique building which which height is over 5m and that is one of the famous scorp sculpture in front of my house.

✓ Yes, I would like to take a photo of a unique building. Near my house there is a unique building whose height is over 5 m, and there is a famous scorpion sculpture in front of my house.

Problems: use 'photo of' not 'photo on'; use indefinite article 'a' with singular countable 'unique building'; subject-verb agreement and singular/plural: 'there is a unique building' rather than 'there are unique building'; use relative pronoun 'whose' to show possession; 'scorp' is likely 'scorpion' and needs article and correct verb placement. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'of', correct articles with singular nouns, and 'whose' for possession. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Umm, yes, one of my favorite building is, uh, it's, it's kind of the mall is, which is located the famous finance area.

✓ Umm, yes, one of my favorite buildings is a mall which is located in the famous financial area.

Errors: 'one of my favorite buildings' requires plural 'buildings' after 'one of'; use 'a mall' not 'the mall is'; use preposition 'in' for location and adjective 'financial' rather than the noun 'finance'. Suggestion: Use correct 'one of' + plural noun structure and proper prepositions/adjective forms. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Umm, the reason why I love this building is because it, it has a unusual, uh, scripture and that made by a famous architecture.

✓ The reason I love this building is that it has an unusual façade, and it was designed by a famous architect.

Issues: 'a unusual' should be 'an unusual' because 'unusual' begins with a vowel sound; 'scripture' is incorrect word for building feature—use 'façade' or 'design'; passive construction needed with past participle ('was designed by a famous architect') and 'architecture' should be 'architect' as the person. Suggestion: Use correct articles 'a'/'an' based on sound, choose accurate vocabulary for building features, and use passive with past participle for 'designed by'. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× Yes I really wanted to leave a a highs building in when I say in Korea I live in a a small building but after coming to Canada I moved the house to the most high speedy which is located the city center center Yes but the advantage of living at a tall building. That.

✓ Yes, I really wanted to live in a high-rise building. In Korea I lived in a small building, but after coming to Canada I moved to a taller apartment in the city center. However, there are advantages to living in a tall building.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'wanted to leave' should be 'wanted to live' (spelling/word choice); use 'lived' for past habit in Korea; 'moved the house to the most high speedy' is incorrect—use 'moved to a taller apartment' or 'moved into a taller building'; 'city center' needs preposition 'in' or 'to the city center'; final fragment must be a complete sentence: 'However, there are advantages to living in a tall building.' Suggestion: Use correct past tense for past situations, choose accurate nouns ('high-rise', 'apartment'), and complete the sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 5