Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words. Also use correct plural/singular forms and prepositions (e.g., “near my home,” “I live in Toronto,” “modern structures”).

예시: Yes. I live in downtown Toronto, so there are many skyscrapers near my home. For example, I can see modern glass towers and office high-rises from my apartment window.

제안: Answer directly, use correct tense and form, and organize ideas with linking words. Use one topic sentence, then a linked supporting detail with an example. Correct common errors: plural forms (“buildings”, “cities”), verb forms (“I usually take”, “I try to remember”).

예시: Not usually. However, when I travel to other cities or countries, I often photograph buildings and cityscapes because each place has a distinct architectural style. For example, I photographed modern skyscrapers in Dubai and historic facades in Prague to compare their different moods.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer. If the subject is not a building, state that and explain why you want to visit, using specific reasons and a brief personal connection. Keep sentences succinct and correct articles and word order.

예시: I would like to visit Central Park in New York, even though it’s not a building. I grew up watching TV shows set there, so I want to see the famous paths, the lake, and the city skyline surrounding the park in person.

제안: Answer clearly and give specific reasons using correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words to connect reasons (e.g., “because”, “so”). Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “like the compiler”) and finish your thought. Mention one or two concrete advantages of living in a tall building.

예시: Yes, I would. I prefer living in a tall building because it is usually quieter above street level and has better security and maintenance. For example, my current apartment on a higher floor is less noisy and has a reliable central air system.

× Yes, there's a lot of skyscraper near from my home because certainly I live in in the Toronto and located in center of the city, so I can see a lot of skyscrapers and modern structure buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of skyscrapers near my home because I live in Toronto, which is located in the centre of the city, so I can see many skyscrapers and modern buildings from my home.

The original sentence misused 'there's' (there is) with a plural noun; use 'there are' for plural (Grammar Problem Type ID 3 and 1). 'Skyscraper' should be plural 'skyscrapers'. 'Near from' is incorrect preposition; use 'near' or 'near my home' (ID 11). Extra articles and words like 'in in the Toronto' are incorrect: remove duplicate 'in' and the definite article before city names is unnecessary (ID 22). 'Modern structure buildings' is awkward; use 'modern buildings' or 'modern-structured buildings'. Also adjusted word order and punctuation to be natural and grammatical.

× I don't really take a photo of building but if I travel another cities or country I always took a landscape and the modern skyscraper because there's a lot of different styles of each cities and mood. So I trying to memorize the city to buying taking a picture of the buildings so I can see the differences in.

✓ I don't usually take photos of buildings, but when I travel to other cities or countries I always take pictures of the landscape and modern skyscrapers because each city has many different styles and atmospheres. So I try to remember the city by taking pictures of the buildings so I can compare the differences.

Multiple errors: 'take a photo of building' should be plural 'take photos of buildings' (ID 1). 'If I travel another cities or country' needs prepositions and plural agreement: 'when I travel to other cities or countries' (IDs 11 and 1). Tense consistency: 'I always took' is past; use present habitual 'I always take' (ID 6). 'I trying' is missing auxiliary 'am' or should be 'I try' (ID 10/6); here present simple 'I try' fits. 'To buying taking a picture' mixes forms; use 'by taking pictures' (ID 8 and 9). 'Each cities' should be 'each city' (ID 1). 'Mood' is incorrect noun choice; use 'atmosphere' or 'style' (ID 13). Overall corrected to maintain present habitual tense and correct verb forms.

× I really like the building that I visit is actually not a building, but it's a place called Central Park because it's one of the biggest and popular park in the city in the world. And I always grew up watching friends drama and the background is New York City and Central Park. So I really would want to visit.

✓ The place I would really like to visit is actually not a building but Central Park because it is one of the biggest and most popular parks in the world. I grew up watching the TV show Friends, which is set in New York City and often features Central Park, so I really want to visit.

Pronoun and noun errors: 'I really like the building that I visit' is confusing; rephrase to 'The place I would really like to visit' (ID 12). 'One of the biggest and popular park' needs parallel structure and plural 'parks' and 'most popular' (ID 25 and 13). 'In the city in the world' is redundant and incorrect preposition use; simplify to 'in the world' (ID 11). 'I always grew up watching friends drama' should be 'I grew up watching the TV show Friends' and 'the background is New York City' should be 'which is set in New York City' (ID 24 and 26). Tense adjusted to simple past for growing up (ID 5). Clarity and natural phrasing improved.

× I definitely want to live in a tall building because when I used to live in a house like the compiler, I heard a lot of noise destruction from the street and air condition is bad quite often. So I definitely prefer living in a tall building without any.

✓ I would definitely like to live in a tall building because when I used to live in a house, I heard a lot of street noise and the air conditioning was often poor. So I definitely prefer living in a tall building.

Sentence structure and word choice errors: 'house like the compiler' is nonsensical; remove irrelevant word 'compiler' (ID 26). 'Noise destruction' is incorrect collocation; use 'street noise' or 'noise from the street' (ID 13). 'Air condition is bad quite often' should be 'the air conditioning was often poor' to match past reference (ID 6 and 13). Ending 'without any' is incomplete; remove it for a complete sentence (ID 23). Overall adjusted tense and phrasing for clarity and grammaticality.