Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., verb forms and pronouns) and avoid vague statements like “maybe you can see.”

예시: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a large shopping center and several high-rise apartment blocks, which give us excellent views over the city. Because of the scenery, I often go for a short walk to relax and feel more motivated.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct tense and pronouns, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because or so). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “shout them.”

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings I like. I take pictures because they remind me of interesting places, and when I travel I can show the photos to my friends. Also, I sometimes look at the pictures later to remember the views.

제안: Give a complete, structured answer: state the building, explain why you want to visit with specific details, and finish the sentence. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas and correct small grammar errors.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the old tower in our town because it has a lot of historical artifacts and interesting rooms inside. I enjoy exploring old buildings, and I would like to go there with friends so we can learn about the history together.

제안: Be specific and correct grammar. Start with a clear statement of preference, explain reasons with concrete details, and avoid unclear phrases like “see our sound.” Use linking words to connect feelings with reasons.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, preferably on a higher floor, because the views are beautiful. For instance, I enjoy watching the city and the sunset from above, and when I feel sad, sitting by the window helps me relax.

× We have lots of towers near my home, we have a big shop center and really tall houses so also we have great views there.

✓ We have lots of towers near my home; we have a big shopping center and really tall houses, so we also have great views there.

'shop center' is incorrect collocation; use 'shopping center'. Sentence runs on; use punctuation. 'so also we have' order is awkward; 'we also have' is correct word order.

× Maybe you can see too and watch them.

✓ Maybe you can see them too and admire the views.

Original is vague and unidiomatic: 'see too and watch them' lacks a clear object and verb choice. 'See them too and admire the views' is clearer and fits context.

× That's how you to stay relaxed and motivate.

✓ That's how I stay relaxed and motivated.

'you to stay' is ungrammatical here; the speaker refers to themselves so use 'I'. Use past participle adjective 'motivated' and simple present 'stay' to match habitual action.

× Usually, usually yes. I take photo photos of the building I liked because when I go outside town and meet my friends I shout them.

✓ Usually, yes. I take photos of buildings I like because when I go out of town and meet my friends I show them.

'photo photos' is redundant; use 'photos'. 'the building I liked' mixes past and general habit—use present 'buildings I like'. 'go outside town' should be 'go out of town'. 'shout them' is incorrect verb choice; likely 'show them' is intended.

× Or maybe when I miss the views I open my phone and watch them.

✓ Or maybe when I miss the views I open my phone and look at them.

'watch' is more for videos; for pictures use 'look at'. Present tense 'miss' is fine as a habitual feeling; verb choice corrected.

× That help me to remember.

✓ That helps me remember.

Subject-verb agreement: 'That' (singular) requires 'helps' (third person singular). Also 'to remember' is unnecessary; 'remember' is clearer.

× I like to visit the old tower in our town. It's very old and there is a lot of things inside it.

✓ I like to visit the old tower in our town. It's very old and there are a lot of things inside it.

'a lot of things' is plural, so use 'there are' not 'there is'. This is a there-be agreement error.

× I like to discover it.

✓ I like exploring it.

'discover' implies first-time finding; 'exploring' better fits visiting and looking around. Also using '-ing' form after 'like' is natural for habitual preference.

× Also I like to go with my friends and.

✓ Also, I like to go with my friends.

Sentence ends with a stray 'and' creating an incomplete sentence. Remove 'and' to complete the thought.

× I would like I would like to live in the fourth building because I like the views inside it.

✓ I would like to live in the fourth building because I like the views from it.

Repeated phrase 'I would like' is redundant. 'views inside it' is unnatural; use 'views from it' to indicate the scenery visible from the building.

× We can see our sound.

✓ We can see our surroundings.

'our sound' is incorrect; likely intended 'surroundings' or 'the sea/sound' (if meaning a body of water 'the sound'). Without context, 'surroundings' fits. Use correct noun for what can be seen.

× Especially when I feel sad, I like to sit there and watch.

✓ Especially when I feel sad, I like to sit there and look at the view.

'watch' is vague; 'look at the view' clarifies what is being watched. Present tense 'feel' and 'like' are appropriate for habitual actions.